Your wife was on the phone - it starts
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Your wife was on the phone - it starts
Our eyes met,
A look of a thousand acts,
A thousand words,
A thousand thoughts.
We opened up Pandora's box and your daughter sang a song.
A soundproof room,
The perfect place,
To strum our strings,
And fall from grace.
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| hooked from line one, it keeps me going untill the end |
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Comment by: - 2006-04-17 15:32
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| Very good - from the title in.... cool cool |
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Comment by: - 2006-04-17 14:02
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| Nice! |
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| Of all of your poems that I have read, this one shows the most promise. |
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| loved it. flows well. good use of alliteration and repetition.simple and lovely . |
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