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Because You Left
Listen to the words unspoken-
The rolling thunder of silence.
There's not a single thought-
But a constant, quiet noise.
An ever lasting storm-
Deep inside your mind.
And you say you don't mind-
These phrases unspoken.
Yet you leave a storm-
When you part in silence.
Leaving wakes of shattered noise-
In a deep sea of thought.
But I don't understand your thoughts-
When I can not read your mind.
With all these shattered noises-
My words will be unspoken.
A never ending silence-
In spite of this inner storm.
And you have created this storm-
Without a single thought.
Forgetting everyone in silence-
Without listening to your mind.
And my words are still unspoken-
Quieted by the noise.
Forever, I will long your noise-
As I suffocate in this storm.
Your silence shows me lies, unspoken.
As I drown in this sea of thought.
And I cannot escape this state of mind-
When you stand there in silence.
I'm still crying out in silence-
Drowning in this sea of noise.
Unwilling to lose my mind-
As you leave me with this storm.
And still I don't have any thought-
Strangled by words unspoken.
I'm still waiting here in silence, smothered in this storm.
Standing here with shattered noise, you haven't left my thoughts.
Yes, deep inside my mind, I wait with words unspoken.
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| This is a very touching poem and I enjoyed it. Keep up the good work. I will look up your writings from time to time. |
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| Thanks. I did it to win a poetry contest in my English class. That other one I have got me in a tie, so I wrote this one that night. I had no idea what I would write about, so my mom-a college student- told me about a type of poetry called a sestina. That is what this is. Now, I can't give a full explanation of it, but it does have a pattern with six different words-as you can tell. Thanks for the comment! -Crystal |
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Comment by: - 2006-04-17 17:42
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| Nice play on the six ending words in every stanza. This form left me a bit dazed, but this was intriguing. I have never read a poem quiet like this before. - Leah |
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