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Olga 253
Olga Moe
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Our Little Secret

The building looked exactly the same. Now, if it still had that identical lock for the laundry room, Nick would find shelter from the rain.

His fingers were sodden, pinching the old metal object he had carried in his wallet for the past two years. The key slipped into its keyhole.. This was going to work.

He shivered and pushed his way through the door.

It was dark, but he dare not pull that old familiar cord above the laundry sink and illuminate the naked bulb. Still quaking from the cold, he crawled along the floor and felt the wall. He found the latch. He turned the smooth, metal protrusion, and a rectangular door opened. Gratefully, he stuffed himself through it.

Now, he reached for a piece of cardboard in his pocket, and he crammed it into the hole where the latch was supposed to go. Then, he closed the door.

It was warm in here. A furnace pumped out heat for the entire apartment building, just on the other side of the wall. It was completely dark,. He had a flashlight with him, in his pack, but he was too tired to feel around for it right now.

He tucked the pack up under his head, trembling, and curled into a fetal position,. Then, he went to sleep.

***

When nick opened his eyes again, he still saw nothing. But he was dry now, and warm.. And he knew where he was. He was finally inside that silvery, insulation-lined storage space in the laundry room.

He had always wondered what it would feel like to live in here. In all the five years he lived in this apartment building and did his laundry here, he had never actually crawled inside this little space.

Of course, back in those days he had a job, and he lived in the apartment with the bay window, up on the third floor.

Last night Nick had walked over twenty miles in the rain to get to this laundry room. Now, he could smile. He felt like he had finally come home.

He clicked his flashlight on. Maybe with the small wad of soggy bills in his pocket he would be able to go out soon and get more batteries for it, along with some crackers and milk. He would get a paper, too. Maybe some kind of temporary labor job would be available.

He heard a noise. Someone was coming. He would have to wait in here until this person was done doing laundry, he supposed. He did not mind. He was happy just to have a private space like this where he could hide and stay warm.

Suddenly, there was a loud thud, a shriek, and then a clatter. Nick heard a groan. It sounded like a woman had slipped and fallen and needed help. He waited. She whimpered now, as if she could not get up.

Without thinking, he poked his head through the tiny trap door.

"Ma'am., are you all right?"

She jerked, and her aging eyes widened.

"Don't be afraid." He squeezed his body through the rest of the way. "Here. Need some help?"

He stood up, bent over and lifted her back to her feet. "Did you hurt yourself?"

"Who..." she stammered. "Who..."

"I live in there. Just for a awhile."

"Oh, you poor, poor boy. I would let you stay with my husband and me, but Dirk would not hear of it. Oh, you poor boy."

"It's not so bad, really, I used to live here. I used to do my laundry in this room all the time. And that little door over there," he pointed to the tiny trap door, "I used to stare at it when I sat right where you are now, and I always told myself that if a person really got down and out, that little room in there would be a chance to start over."

"What's it like in there?"

"Cozy. Nice. Especially when you've been walking around in the streets all tired in the rain."

The woman's face took on a look of enchantment. "Is it soft?"

"Sort of. It could be, I mean. I didn't really notice last night, I was so happy just to be there"

"May I look inside?"

Sure. I'll show you." Nick squeezed back inside the room and picked up his flashlight. "See?"

"That's wonderful!" she exclaimed.

"And you won't tell anyone?"

"Of course not. I'm proud of you for trying so hard to make a go of things like you are."

She leaned in to look once more.

"My name is Mrs. Dench, by the way. What is yours?"

"Nick."

"Well, Nick,. I think this is just wonderful."

****

Much later that evening, while Nick was reading the paper by flashlight and nibbling on crackers and an apple, he heard a timid knock.

"Nick?" It sounded like that Mrs. Dench lady, the one he met in the afternoon..

He pushed open the tiny door.

"I brought you some things," Mrs. Dench said. "Look. Here's a cushion for you from the porch lounge, and here's a sleeping bag. And see? I brought you a little lamp. And a portable TV. They just run off this little battery box, here. You can charge up an extra one in that cupboard over there. No one will be the wiser."

"Oh, Mrs. Dench. You didn't have to..."

"Fran, Dear. Call me Fran. Now don't be silly. And see? Here's a little plate of dinner I brought for you.. Nothing much. You must be getting hungry. Spread the blanket over the cushion, okay? And set up the TV. I want to be able to picture you in there."

Nick did has he was told. Then, when he propped himself up cross legged against a pillow with her plate of dinner help in his lap, she clasped her hands up to her chin and sighed. Her face was ecstatic.

"May I come in a minute, please?"

"Sure. It's kind of crowded, though."

She grunted slightly, squeezing her body through the door., Then, she wheezed and sat back to look around.

"Oh, Nick, she sighed. "I envy you. I wish I could live in this little room like you."

"Why?"

"Oh, because it's yours. No one can pick on you and tell you what to do. You're so lucky."

She looked at her watch. Oh, I guess I had better go. My husband will be wondering what happened to me. He's such a fuddy duddy, always keeping track of what I do. It's not because he really cares that much about me, you understand. Its just some kind of habit of his, like he's rounding up his property."

She sighed again. "It's really hard to break old habits when you get to be our age, the kids grown and gone, and all."

"I'm sorry, Fran, if you're not happy."

"Oh, I'm happy." She pushed her body back out through the small rectangle. Then, her head popped back in. "I just wish I lived here like you, that's all."

She stood up to leave. "Well. Good night, Nick. Good luck finding a job tomorrow. I hope you are more comfortable now."

"Good night, Fran," called Nick, softly. Thank you. I am."

He heard the heavy outer door of the laundry room close, and the foot steps of Mrs. Dench faded as they traipsed up the outside stairs.

Nice Lady, he thought, stretching out on his fluffy new bed.

****

The following evening, Nick heard another woman's voice outside his door.

"Knock knock," it sang.

"Fran," he called. "Is that you?"

"No. this is Blanche. Are you the guy that lives in the wall?"

Nick pushed open the door.

"Hi," said the woman, beaming. "Fran told me about you.. She's my sister. This is really cute. Could I look inside?"

She poked her head through the door and surveyed the tiny, silvery space. "This is darling. Don't tell Fran, okay? She would be mad if I came to see you. It's always been that way, even when we were girls. She always had little secrets going on in her life that she wouldn't share with me. May I come inside?"

"Sure, I think."

The woman wriggled her body through the open rectangle, huffing, with her long earrings bobbing.

"There," she said, finally. "Whew! Oh, I like it here. It must be so peaceful just to live like this."

"Well, it's really just temporary..."

"You ought to see what it's like living with a teenaged daughter," Blanche went on. "Care if I smoke?"

"Uhh..."

'"Oh, that's right. I didn't bring any with me."

She looked around. "Is that the TV Fran brought you? I could probably bring you a bigger one. Don't tell Fran, okay? She just wants to keep you to herself. She's older than me, you know. Her kids are all grown. My daughter and I live just down the hall from Fran. Sometimes I wish I had a place like this just to get away from my daughter. Boy oh boy, it sure is peaceful in here. Any luck today finding a job?"

"I think they're hiring down at the fish cannery."

"Oh boy, are you lucky to be single and not have any kids. You just live in a wall, go out and find a job..." She shook her head and her earrings swayed. "Boy oh boy."

Nick slid up next to one corner, trying to find a place to stretch his legs.

"Well," Blanche said abruptly. "I guess I'll go. I brought you something." She reached out through the opening and pulled in a paper sack. "Sweet rolls. I can bring you things too, you know, it's not like Fran has a monopoly."

Then, with a thrust, Blanche pushed herself through the door. "Good luck on that job tomorrow, Nick. And Let's just keep this little visit to ourselves."

After the clamor of a few clumsy thuds, there was the sound of a door closing. Then, there was silence.

***

It was another evening. Nick's body was sore from putting in a second day at the fish cannery. He tucked the sleeping bag up around his neck, turned on the tiny TV, and settled back to enjoy a comfortable pause in time before going to sleep.

He heard a knock on his door.

"Nick? Is your name Nick?"

This time, it sounded like it came from a very young woman.

"Yes."

"Can I come in and see your place? Please? I heard my mm talking about you to Aunt Fran."

Nick sighed, then slowly he pushed open the door. Crouching outside of the portal was a teenaged girl.

"Hi. My name is Kiki. Short for Katherine. Her long hair fell forward into her face. "Wow. Cool!!" she exclaimed, lunging through the door. "I'd give anything to have a little place like this. Then I could get away from my mother!"

"I don't think this is a good idea."

"You are so lucky. I can't believe it. I saw that little door a million times when I was doing the laundry. Why didn't I ever think of something like this? Are you gonna be staying here long? Can I have this room when you're done with it?"

"Sure, but..."

"Upstairs, my mom's always saying do this, do that, don't do this, don't do that." She blew out air. "And you get to just sit down here and watch TV. What are you watching?"

"I don't know, really. But I think I should be going to sleep pretty soon."

"Oh." She looked startled. "Oh. Okay. Sorry. I just had to see what this thing was all about. Aunt Fran told my mom, like it's a big secret, and I just had to come see. Don't tell her, okay?"

She flipped her head and a ripple of hair slithered across her bony shoulder. "Well, here I go."

Then, in one graceful undulation she was once again standing on the outside. "

"You're place is really cool," she squeaked, ducking her face back in. "Well, don't tell my mom I know, okay?"

"Okay."

She made barely a sound as she departed.

***

It had been another full day of work. Tomorrow, Nick would even get paid. There would not be much, but it would be a start. He felt satisfied and achy, very tired, as he curled up on his cushion and closed his eyes. He hoped that no one would come in to do laundry this evening. He did not want to be bothered by all that sloshing and clanking around. In a few minutes, he might even turn off the small lantern Fran had given him, curl up in this warm, intimate region, and go to sleep.

Suddenly, there was an urgent banging on the door.

"Nick, are you there?"

"What's the matter?" he asked.

"Lemme in. Quick. I'm running away."

"You're what?"

She yanked open his door, slipped in and frantically clutched at it to pull it shut. Her face was blotched with tears, and swollen. "Doesn't this thing have a lock?"

"Kiki, wait. What's going on? This isn't right."

She flung her body against one corner of the chamber, folded her arms in front of her and stuck out her lower lip. "I'm never going out there again."

"Kiki, wait a minute. What happened? If they find you in here with me, they'll think I kidnapped you or something."

"Well, I knew about this place before you did," she whined. "You don't have anything to do with it."

"Well, you've got to leave. You've got to talk to your mother."

"No."

Nick sighed. He started to gather a few things. Maybe he could find an extra bed at the Mission tonight, or something. At least tomorrow, he would get paid.

"Then I'm leaving," he said.

"Go ahead."

He grabbed his pack and started to crawl through the door, when a pair of rigid, denim clad legs slammed up next to his face. He looked up.

"You the dude who's been messin" with Kiki?"

Nick crawled back into his room.

"Come on out, Punk," the voice went on. "I know you got her in there right now. You come out or I'm comin' in. I'll cream your ass!!"

Nick sat frozen to his spot.

"You comin' out, or am I comin' in?"

At that moment, someone else entered the laundry room.

"Rodney Treeker!" Blanch roared. "I told you to stay away from my daughter! What in the hell are you doing down here?"

"She ain't with me. She's with that dude in there."

"I am not!" Kiki squealed.

"You're wrong, Rodney," snapped Blanche. "She's in there just so she can get away from you!"

"I am not, Mother. I'm in here so I can get away from you. You never like any of my boyfriends. You're always telling me what to do."

"Katherine Jane Simpson, you come out of that place right now."

"No."

"If you don't come out this instant," threatened Blanche, "Then I'm coming in."

"Er, excuse me," said Nick. "I'll just get out of the way, here."

Cautiously, he crept out the door of his cubicle and on along the wall of the laundry room. He remembered he had seen a mouse do this once. Then, in a reckless leap, he jerked open the laundry room door and tore out into the open air.

He ran for a while, awkwardly, with his legs aching and his pack tottering around on his shoulders. Finally, he rested. He hid behind a tree. He looked back at the apartment house from which he had just fled.

He saw Fran walking around in the yard, heading toward the laundry room, carrying a pillow and a large plate of food.

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Comment by: - 2005-09-29 23:56
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This is an interesting story about a person seeking nothing but his own company who ends up being the centre of attention. You have captured this here. I could just imagine it all happening.
nice one.
Comment by: - 2005-09-09 06:19
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Wow thanks for your story and your comments. I liked this story. I also love being alone in small spaces like that. Yet the guy is unable to escape the world. There was a time I lived in my office, (after a divorce) ...and one night I found myself laughing out loud at the Dave Letterman show, thinking, good lord, here you are sleeping on a cot where you work and still you can laugh. I actually have a story about that that I will post. It will take some patience though. It's much beyong the 2500 word suggestion.

Darryl
GaryGlauber Comment by: GaryGlauber - 2005-07-29 09:57
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Olga,

Another nicely done tale. Nick gives up his secret hiding place to Fran rather easily, I thought. I'd have thought he'd be more protective of it - and it might heighten the story more if he swears each person to secrecy (which obviously gets violated more and more). Further, Nick doesn't seem overly upset by these increasing intrusions (other than that he longs for some rest). I'd think he'd want to keep his private secret space more to himself...and if those stakes are heightened, it matters more when he finally chooses to leave it. Thanks again for the read! Gary
oglejames Comment by: oglejames - 2005-07-05 08:12
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Olga,

This is nice little piece about something everyone needs, but has a hard time finding: a little patch of freedom, peace and solitude. When Nick finds it, he learns that everyone else wants it and finally has to abandon the comforts of his place to the usurpers.

Some things to think about:

The line, ??It was warm in here.? This is the only place we see inside Nick??s head. The rest of your narration is in 3rd person objective voice. Can you say, ??It was warm inside?? Or how about, ??It was warm, cozy??

Many of your character??s lines start with, ??Oh, or well,? to get their train of thought going. While everyone does this in the real world, it affects the pacing of dialogue and might be better left out unless essential for character development. Same for the use of the word, ??just.?

Typo in the following sentence, extra comma after fetal position(,).

I loved the way that Nick is introduced to one family member after another and the way his secret hiding place is revealed; also the secret desires of each person.

You created a small, familiar world, like Nick??s cozy hiding place, where things are discovered that might be better left undiscovered. Everyone except Nick harbors jealousies and animosities toward the other people in their lives. Each of them needs what Nick has, which doesn??t seem like much, but to them, seems like everything.

The last image of Fran walking toward the laundry room with a pillow and a plate of food wraps up your story nicely.

Jim
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