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BloodyMuffins
Chelsea Watt
United States, MA, Newburyport

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Bombs

BOMBS


 


Bombs cavorting on streets,


                                    Bombs with hands and feet,           


Slightly swaying,


From original direction,


And quickly gathering speed.


 


We wait for the explosion,


While negotiating implosion,


And get rags ready,


Heavy with spray,


To clean the Macabre.


 


Sullen and waiting,


For the next heavy meeting,


Tired but driven,


By unexpected impulse,


That drives them away.


 


Not what we were expecting,


But still awkwardly suspecting,


Some sudden change of mind,


Turn of the tide,


Stopping by than running away.


 


We're all bombs,


Blowing up inside,


Inside spreads outward,


And real destruction occurs,


Despite comforting words.


 


Smoke placates and soothes the mind,


Smoke from cathedrals,


And bombs dropping on London,


Make fire roaring through here,


It's a red, robust, embodiment of all we fear.


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AJSmith Comment by: AJSmith - 2006-08-22 08:08
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Good exploration of fear and paranoia - with subtle suggestions towards those who blow themselves up. If the second line was purposefully askew, i'd change it to the 3rd line. In fact, here's an idea - do it to one line in each stanza - use it to emphasise the macabre. (to clean the macabre was my favourite line)

Very strong couplet ending. I don't know why but i'm thinking 'it's a red, robust rust of all we fear' instead of 'embodiment.' Rust has that decaying element to it that i like. Just an idea.

Overall, i thought this was a very strong piece of writing.
jagainst Comment by: jagainst - 2006-04-22 13:27
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Love how you describe the anger and explosive, undeniable fear we all experience. Great descriptions!
Comment by: - 2006-04-18 14:26
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startling and dazzling imagery
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