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nonalienabductee
Niccole Segura
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I Sacrifice Myself for Love

I know this is the end


The gods refuse to bend


It's I who must their wrath appease.


I go to where I must


I have our people's trust


I know I'll meet my death with ease.


 


They took my hand and said


'We'll miss you when you're dead


Thank you so much for what you do.'


They bathed me 'til I shone


Then left me all alone.


They knew I'd want to talk with you.


 


(chorus) It's said it's better when


You've loved and lost, but then


It is so hard to give up love.


I watch you as you cry


We know I have to die.


I sacrifice myself for love.


 


You beg me come away;


You know I have to stay.


Don't hurt me when I need you most.


They come - you're crying still


They lead me up the hill


I could be just another ghost.


 


We walk in silence white


The stars shine in the night


The moon glows down among us all.


My hair is tied with pearl


A pale young virgin girl


I'll look so graceful when I fall.


 


(chorus)


 


It's only you I'll miss


We share our final kiss


You step aside to let me go


My eyes tear in the smoke


They'll make just one swift stroke


The knife - and then the volcano.


 


I wait, patient, for death


Soon comes the final breath


The knife is raised - but then let drop


You've jumped into the fire


You scream upon your pyre


And with your death the flames all stop


 


It's said it's better when


You've loved and lost, but then


It is so hard to give up love


I watch you as you die


And I begin to cry


You sacrificed yourself for love.


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kyrasdaddy Comment by: kyrasdaddy - 2006-04-26 12:23
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Bookshelved, this piece was simply amazing, in every single way. So many ways this can be taken, so many thoughts came from this, thoughts of Jesus dying on a cross for me, thoughts of how my father gave up everything to keep me safe, and thoughts of all that I have sacrificed for those I love. This is quite possibly one of the most elegant yet magnificent pieces I've read, the flow superb and the message impeccable.
inviscera Comment by: inviscera - 2006-04-26 08:02
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Truly lovely. Easy to fall into over-used cliches with the whole love/death thing and to end up sounding like lyrics to a HIM song, but you've avoided that. Great work.
CrackaZach Comment by: CrackaZach - 2006-04-22 22:15
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Well, I like the symbolism of the virgin sacrifice and an unexpected one, in turn for the original. The only problem is that I, personally, have a lust for meatier words. Hey, maybe I just have a cold chasm of stone where my gizzard should currently be residing. All in all, a creative concept.
frumpalump Comment by: frumpalump - 2006-04-21 13:38
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i like the way you chose to rhyme here. i liked the message too. well done.
Dance6 Comment by: Dance6 - 2006-04-19 16:42
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Very very good. I loved this one. The rhyming was perfect. YOu are a veererrrrryyy talented writer. I love this. AMAZING!!!! Wonderful. Keep it uppp!
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