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bambi11577
Bambi Fugate-Gilpin
United States, Massachusetts, Wakefield

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dream love

You are the light in my eyes at night.
My thoughts of you never end.

I see us touch and hug and kiss.
I feel your arms around my body.

I have watched us share dreams, dance and pray.
We have made love all night.

I see us young, I see us old.
I see years pass by and my heart grows more.

I want those things I see each night,
When you light up my eyes in dream.

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chillibeani826 Comment by: chillibeani826 - 2008-01-10 09:39
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Lovely!!!!!!!
CowgirlSerenity Comment by: CowgirlSerenity - 2008-01-10 09:16
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Beautiful...
Glen aka FAD Comment by: Glen aka FAD - 2007-12-23 18:37
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Bambi - your verse was good and the meaning is there in the work... I'd just rework:

I see us touch and hug and kiss.
(by taking out "and", to read:
I see us touch, hug and kiss.

Like your 5th line, so the flow of your work continues throughout...


Glen Yumang Manese
Tayo Comment by: Tayo - 2006-12-21 05:04
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Love has Power. Its good to know the source.
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