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Funkylele
Daniele Ponzi
Canada, Ontario, Toronto

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Angst Became A Tumbleweed Town

Warm and tender the air
Caresses and Kisses me
Hugging my torso
Under a shower of stars
The moon is holding her breath
And offering pale magic

Walking a street paved in
Glorious human souls dancing
I wonder how I could have
Been cynical, ever, about
This long coloured coiling rope
Of timelined experience

Sounds collide in a chaos of
Harmony and innuendo
As we float through a scenery
Crafted with infinite intrigue
Her dark legs flash like
Obsidian obsession

I capture a moment and
Inhale it like incense
I hold my breath in tribute
To the musing moon

White jacketed and brandishing
A cigarette to counterpoint our
Languid rhythmic stroll I feel the
Gravity of her hips pulling eyes as
Her smile leaps to spread across the
Faces of all those looking our way

I gather some Mariachi to accompany
Our movement through the scene
This moment deserves a soundtrack
Gods above I love this town
Somehow I get them to strum
The Bond theme, flamenco styled.

A shirtless drunken reveller
Of multifaceted sexual inclination
Joins us for a while, outrageous
And Remi laughs and banters
'this is what I'm talking about' he says
'A woman who can laugh like that'

He drifts away to find his own
Superspy moment.
I coil smoke around my fingers
Let it drift up to the moon.
"Release your breath" I say
In my deepest arcane wizard voice.

The moon breathes out
And the world is swept away in light

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KennethWelling Comment by: KennethWelling - 2007-11-09 08:06
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The title is indeed great. I also like your concrete details -- like the drunken reveler that joins you and the mariachi band playing the bond theme.
Thunderpen Comment by: Thunderpen - 2007-10-30 06:36
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Great title!
Such a lovely poem.
I've had summer nights walks in the city when we had to wade through a river of love. Once this big hard-lookin' dude gave me "the look" and instead of shrugging and walking past, I rounded on him and walked right up to his face, not in a "fight or flee" motion, but in open-hearted playfulness. I had guessed right! He laughed and gave me a hug and we went our ways. My little gaggle of friends stood with their faces full of question, but the instant friendship had changed all doubt to reaffirmation.
That's what this excellent heartbeat poem does for me.
crazybeau Comment by: crazybeau - 2006-04-22 23:45
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great!! i love the poem, hey, can you share me techniques in writing your poems???
frumpalump Comment by: frumpalump - 2006-04-21 11:17
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wow. that was amazing. nice write!
jagainst Comment by: jagainst - 2006-04-21 09:44
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I can't really voice anything that has already been said, but this is great...your descriptions are dead on, and the ending..."the moon breaths out..." Awesome.
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