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Bbounty1
Scott Waugh
United States, Oklahoma, B... Fu..

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Dissatisfied

Things were supposed to be,

so simple now.

It's funny how things change.

Three kids, two cars, a house and garage,

Yes, we're livin' the American Dream. We're both a little older now... and times are tough,

but we get by.

So why in the world am I so...

Dissatisfied?.

I don't want to leave you now, but I feel that I might...

need some time.

I don't want to lie to justify, just feel I need a....

change.

 Yes, we're a little older now, and times are tough,

but we get by,

so why in the world do I feel  so....

Dissatisfied?

 I don't want... to leave you now,

 but I feel that I need some...time to figure out what's wrong with me.

What weighs so heavy, on my....

mind?

 Maybe I should take a trip?

 Maybe I need a one night stand.

 You're so damned oblivious. Da da dum, da ta duuuum...

Yes we're both a little older now,

and times are tough, but we get by,

 so why in the world do I feel so...

Dissatisfied...


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lolly Comment by: lolly - 2006-05-10 05:06
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this song is going to be on all the happenin' jukeboxes in the u.s. next year. WATCH!
xxxxxx Comment by: xxxxxx - 2006-04-23 09:40
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cute
bonnieclarke Comment by: bonnieclarke - 2006-04-22 20:29
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this was very nicely written with a lot of hidden meaning that many can relate to. dissatisfied feelings sometimes create the best words.
"time to figure out what's wrong with me" I've said that to myself about a million times...still didn't get my answers yet...lol.
SpadedHeart Comment by: SpadedHeart - 2006-04-22 13:55
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very very nice
frumpalump Comment by: frumpalump - 2006-04-21 11:35
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i don't know if it was intended to be a song or not, but i certainly could see it turn into one. easily. enjoyed it.
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