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Stevie Gray
United Kingdom, Oxfordshire, Banbury

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4:37am... still awake

The walls turn dark,
then light,
then dark again.
Another day over.
A street lamp
casts its sodium glow
through the open window.
Night-time noises
carry on an indifferent breeze
- occasional traffic,
cats fighting amongst rubbish bins,
distant trains -
and the smell of rain.
I imagine the grass,
wet and yielding,
and how it would feel
under bare feet.
I could go outside,
feel that for myself,
smell the damp earth up close
and let the rain fall on me.
But the door
and the garden beyond
seem so far away.

Instead I sit,
and watch the walls slowly lighten again,
in a room that would
probably be
slightly less empty
if I weren't in it.

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Pyewacket Comment by: Pyewacket - 2006-06-08 14:54
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I always love to read your writing--you seem to be the most descriptive with so little words--the imagery is wonderful here--
Teri Comment by: Teri - 2006-05-21 19:21
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I never knew insomnia could be so beautiful! Too many lines I love to list; I think I love all of them. But the last stanza is absolute brilliance in its simplicity and magic. As always, wonderful work, Stevie! Thank you for this (as an insomniac, I'm also envious, haha).
:)
ashleymc Comment by: ashleymc - 2006-05-16 11:49
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Very nice poem. You use such amazing words. I love your writing!
Comment by: - 2006-04-26 20:47
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lovely poem.but i didn't understand 1 thing- if u would b outside, ur room would be more empty, right?
mom Comment by: mom - 2006-04-26 18:26
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What talent. I loved it. What a brilliant future that awaits you.
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