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denisedee
denise dee
United States, AZ, Flagstaff

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I was not thinking

Your heart is broken, I know that
but it's not what I'm thinking
as your mouth meets mine
fingers moving in and out of me
Your heart is broken, I know that
but it's not what I'm thinking as
I look at your heavy eyes, dark, half-shut
head thrown back
ecstatic,
mouth partly open
I put my fingers on it, in it
I put my hand to your throat,
skin so soft
smooth
I look at your face
you are so young

I was not thinking
the smell of your skin, hair
sweat would work it's way
into the cracks
of my lips
bruised
your fingers, mouth, teeth
biting me
I thought I would open
my mind, arms, legs, body to you
I was not thinking
of your raw smell
on my sheets

My cells will fall away, die, reform
I will have a body that never knew
your hands, your mouth
that body will not miss you
I was not thinking
I could miss you
hearts are raw
I know that
but I was not thinking
of bleeding


for D. 10/01

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Mrs Woolf Comment by: Mrs Woolf - 2007-11-18 19:32
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Delightful! :]

You squeezed
the juices
out of every word
aprilmayed Comment by: aprilmayed - 2007-11-08 09:29
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The repetition of "I was not thinking" was very affective. This was a moving and honest piece. It makes me want to read lots more of your work!
ThiaHarrington Comment by: ThiaHarrington - 2007-08-10 18:31
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Powerful piece. I really enjoyed reading.
bronzen Comment by: bronzen - 2007-08-10 18:29
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tantalizing and beautiful write
citydweller Comment by: citydweller - 2007-08-06 13:37
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This poem has a nice lyrical quality.

Just a small punctuation item from my inner copy editor:
For the line "sweat would work itâ??s way," "it's" should be "its."

Thanks for sharing.
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