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stop
why am i here
where am i going
what will i be
is there any way of knowing
how will i find
peace of mind
in a world where everyone sins
and the rest are preparing for their coffins
while im standing on a mountain
staring into space
listening to mother nature with her ultimate grace
saying stop the destruction
stop the hate
is there any way to calm down and negotiate
but there isnt , weve gone too far
the only thing we can do is wish on a star
and hope for a better tomorow
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me again, i hear your poetry, i am the one with the mean pruning sheers and the breathing holes; i sense your anguish, your love and urgency.
i see the artist expressing many thoughts here.
i hear the musician expelling the excess.
what i don't feel is the succession, a repetition of the title when one complete thought is said. and a soft silence in between.
alone in a corner, read aloud, detached and hear the writer within, write what you ad-lib and your inner rhythm will be your perfect guide. |
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Comment by: danae - 2007-03-01 13:43
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inner doubts in a macro world...we all wonder where we fit in, how and who else inhabits the world of imagination...
You're never alone with a dream; you always improve when you find disillusion and disgrace. Some hate to live; other live to hate.
If there is a balance, I wonder what they weigh...
Nice wording...Danae |
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Comment by: sudipal - 2007-02-26 13:56
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| There's a lot of emotion raging through this poem. I can feel it. Good job. |
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| Naive womanhood. |
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Comment by: - 2006-09-15 05:43
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| i feel a lot of emotion in your writing and hope that you continue with it....I like the construction of the coffins section as i read the other comments. If it had been mine, i would have had a space between, not a word change. But I tend to write in sentence groups of 4 as well so a personal preference. I do like this poem |
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