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From a Mother to Her Daughter...

My spiritual capabilities astound me, myself, I never thought I could care this much about somebody else. I'm trying to expose my feelings, bringing out what's deep within me. Molding another personality, a new persona; a child, a girl, then a woman. Making sure that her feelings for herself exceed those for any other except her own seeds. Just as I must do for she: faithfully, my whole life long. Care for her, nurture her, and do the best I can to shelter her from all that is wrong with this Earth. My tiniest resemblance, a replica: mimicking all of the good from me and ignorant of all the bad. May her achievements be mine times ten (or twenty), transcending all others, in no matter what situation she may be. Forming her is changing me, for the better; letting me know that I have a purpose here, on this Earth.

 

My love, my heart, my little one; challenge me in ways that I may never know again. We're in this together, through all good or bad weather, forever, on this Earth and beyond. May your heart fill up and spill over with the unconditional love that is overflowing from mine. Never knowing my bad side: showing me perfection in my own mind. I will never know what could have become of me had you not come along and turned a mistake into some kind of beautiful song that will be eternally worth singing. A mistake that was worth making and learning from. Molding another personality, a new persona; a child, a girl, then a woman. Forming you is changing my life on this Earth, forever.


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Kerosene Comment by: Kerosene - 2006-06-02 15:44
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You can sense the emotion in this piece and that's what makes it so strong. Thanks for sharing.

One Suggestion:
Maybe change the first sentence by adding a period after the word "me". Then start the next sentence on "Myself,..."
Comment by: - 2006-05-13 13:56
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Have you ever thought about framing that piece and possibly seeing who would be interested in a framed copy of it?
oncemore Comment by: oncemore - 2006-04-25 03:49
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That was really beautiful. I can't wait to have those feelings for a little someone.

"I will never know what could have become of me had you not come along and turned a mistake into some kind of beautiful song that will be eternally worth singing."

That part was just gorgeous. This would be such a beautiful piece to keep and show the child when they are old enough to understand. And also for you to look back and remember this time.
Jamilah Comment by: Jamilah - 2006-04-24 20:39
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You must be a new mother. I don't think anyone else could understand the feelings as you've described them. This is a nicely done piece on the love of a mother for her child.
"I never thought I could care this much about somebody else." That says it all.
Comment by: - 2006-04-24 17:51
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Beautifully done, it was like a letter to a child for them to pick up when the mother is gone. I liked the emotion and as a mother, these feelings are quite true
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