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psgri2003
Paul Grimsley
United States, Florida, New Port Richey

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mauled

there is no escape from the soundtrack
the all pervasive invasive muzak
the gutted tune without any taste
inspiration turned to industrial waste
trapped in the elevator going down
it's supposed to smooth away the frown
but this is death by jukebox roulette
uninspired musicians play an endless set

through every-second advertising we trawl
every town has caught the disease of mall
all the small shops long ago went to the wall
and we were seduced like angels tricked into the fall
our psychological landscape forever scarred
by the plastic surgery of a sponsored credit card
i sign my life away with an advertising pen
we are the robots come to displace men

every song i claim to have ever loved
down my throat in a saccharine form now shoved
it is like i am a zombie, behaviour drugged
they know me because my breakfast cereal's bugged
i find myself curiously able to sing all
the advertising tunes and each radio jingle
they stole my soul as i sleptwalk through the day
and they continue still expecting me to pay

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wellnessthruplay Comment by: wellnessthruplay - 2006-04-26 11:59
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Wow paul. This is an amazing write,. I love the line about your cereal being bugged. how the advertising thge everything is a hypnoyic transe stealing our souls our minds without our permission. Great job. Sorry I have been on vacation from you. I am catching up. Great job...as always
Min Comment by: Min - 2006-04-26 09:17
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Guess the new job got to you. Couple of spelling errors...something for you to sort out. Contained many of the modern takes on consumerism, credit cards and the invisible men who run big business and the politicians. Glad to find you aware of the brainwashing of society....you'll survive.
Comment by: - 2006-04-26 08:16
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this is great, paul. your writing keeps getting better and better. everyone i've read lately i've thought, "this is definitely my favourite". amazing write. so raging, so raw and witty. love it.
moley Comment by: moley - 2006-04-26 07:07
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Fantastic. Paranoia, and references to consumerism, great stuff. I loved: 'inspiration turned to industrial waste / trapped in the elevator going down / it's supposed to smooth away the frown', as well as the final stanza. Brilliant.
MaggieMay Comment by: MaggieMay - 2006-04-26 07:07
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once again an amazing opening line, its thought provokin at the very least at least for me :)
Great theme, very relevant. Very truthful and well crafted. great job today :)
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