Foundation Covers the Hidden Hurt
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Foundation Covers the Hidden Hurt
She became striking with a smile,
Like a bruise
When the meaning is forgotten:
Purple fading into yellow -
The colour of a violent storm.
This perfectly painted expression
Remained publicly permanent.
In the private spheres,
Where they danced in sheets -
She experienced love like a fist:
Leaving contusions and scars,
Slapped into the shape
Of a wandering man's palm:
Expensive weaves of silk
Concealed her blushing arms.
Her body became a battlefield.
Words blemished like bayonets,
Fierce as bullets; ploughing
Through esteem like a harvester
Amongst ripe crops.
Lips violently met with hers:
Sharing a brutal kiss: an expected
Silent contract written
In their saliva,
As the link became a cemetery.
The burden melted before
Her back broke:
Breathing in, with a breath
She never thought would
Taste so young.
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| stunning. an edgy topic written so beautifully. |
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| I am floored by this. To write so beautifuly about something so brutal, so that it is easy to read, so that the images bed down in your mind, so they resonate in a way they might not do if this were written in a different style. What more can I say than this: fantastic. |
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For me the words are not as deep as what is going on. It's somehow removed, and maybe you want us to be removed, because it is heavy going. But I feel like I'm in my head watching rather than experiencing. Again, maybe that is what you want because in violence a person does step a bit outside their body to deal with it.
That said, as a poem the images are good, and the rhythm is strong. |
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Comment by: lofty - 2006-04-27 06:09
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| really love all this...super. |
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Comment by: - 2006-04-27 03:45
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| the penultimate stanza just rocks... but the whole thing does. top marks amy... cool cool |
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