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poster children
we are the poster children
each born under a slogan
the meaningful phrases? we killed them
banality our shogun
we believe in the lie of self-help books
we will swallow whatever you tell us
we don't understand the phrase too many cooks
and we'll buy whatever you sell us
every drug is dangerous we know
if we eat that kind of food we'll never grow
we're always dooomed to reap what we sow
we never go where we're not meant to go
can you see the poster, child?
do you acknowledge its truth?
do you see how the message was defiled?
bemoan the idiocies of youth
we know how to identify a liar
we know what it takes to inspire
we know how to avoid the fire
all you bookheads can go retire
heroin chic, warzone bleak
the busted antique
the condensed guide to a week
to be different's to be freak
iron all the difference out
learn to whisper never shout
forget opinion embrace doubt
here's the asylum you'll never get out
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Comment by: Elinki - 2006-04-27 13:08
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| another fantastic piece Paul. nice ryhme and flow. and the messege was delivered extreamly well. good job. |
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Comment by: - 2006-04-27 12:15
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'We believe in the lie of self-help books'
'heroin chic, warzone bleak' are my two favourite lines. Fantastic, as always.
The rhyme and rhythm make it even more hard-hitting. I love your gritty stance on society. |
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we know how to identify a liar
we know what it takes to inspire
we know how to avoid the fire
all you bookheads can go retire" -- great rhythm especially this stanza, its almost using alliteration :) |
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| Poster children indeed, giving hard earned money in purchase of false claims. Powerful theme, and you stick to it throughout. Good writing. |
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| you've done a very nice job with balancing the lines in this one, and yet not loosing the thought process. The direction of your point stays straight and true even though the style is withing a defined form. |
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