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Eternal
Darkest at dawn,
the night fades away
Usurping light
breaks into day
The sands of time
are rubbed from groggy eyes
As the shining sun
steals from its disguise
The twinkling of stars
dims and goes astray
Blacks turn to blue
Night into day
and forever the ceaseless cycle
will spin
day into night,
around,
and again...
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| This is excellent. I'm off to read some more. |
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I like how you avoid "and around again" in the last line.
You touch the larger themes. |
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| it feels like a lullaby to me... I love the imagery of your words. :P Nice work! |
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Comment by: craj - 2007-05-30 22:41
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| hey mystie you've got themysterical imagery and the way you choose words is very impressive a life may not worth the worth of your 5 minutes work keep it up .................... |
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| beautiful sentiment.. flowed like the lyrics of a song. i liked the rhyming scheme, it fit together seamlessly and wasnt at all forced. |
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