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hidethedetails
kristel yoneda
United States, dc, washington

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a tiny declaration

Got caught in a snowstorm the other night,
The winter blast carried us to your house.

In the morning, long before you awoke
I went out on the balcony and watched these children shake the white off the bushes.
In pajamas and my coat,
I let the crisp morning breeze greet me and my bare feet.
I noticed the snow had left a pretty blanket on your plants,
So I scooped some into my bare hands
And began to mold my feelings with careful fingers and gentle palms.
I left my heart at your doorstep
Just to let you know that you were on my mind,
Then went back inside and crawled into bed with you,
A light trail of snow had followed me from the door.

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hopefeardream Comment by: hopefeardream - 2006-04-29 11:18
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Nice; i really like your poems
Euripides Comment by: Euripides - 2006-04-28 16:41
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This is so calm and quiet. And the transition from blanket outside to bed inside is delicately done.
henrydavidlau Comment by: henrydavidlau - 2006-04-27 15:33
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Great poem, even though it was about snow it left me feeling all warm inside :)
hulshizer Comment by: hulshizer - 2006-04-27 13:49
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Actually, I hate snow, but I enjoyed your words. Nicely done.
inviscera Comment by: inviscera - 2006-04-27 11:02
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Lovely piece. Great feel to it - the kind of excitement you get when it snows when you're a kid. Love those two opening lines. Altogether, just a wonderful poem.
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