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The unforgotten (revised)
He tried to block her rage with his hand
But she was too big
And she was angry
She was always angry
A welt on his wrist
led to wounds,old and new.
Delicate young flesh, corrupted
A big man in a uniform had a camera
Flashes filled the too full room
The boy's face was red with emotion
Mom cried, Dad punched something
They had put their trust in a stranger
and their child had paid with his hide
With time he forgot her twisted face
His flesh mended just fine
But little triggers still fire snapshots
of a sick womans rage
The scent of a musky room
A worn leather belt
A hand raised too quickly
Meatloaf
Yeah, meatloaf
These and others can still
make him cringe.
Things that should be nothing
Bring him back to a dark place
A place of fear,hatred, pain
As more time passes
some of these will retire from his mind
But until then he would like to say "thanks".
"Thanks for the memories, you miserable bitch".
( the first version of this made it sound like my mom was the abuser,when in fact it was a "care giver" )
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Comment by: Min - 2006-07-12 05:04
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| As a very personal poem it was right to add the details to clarify the identity of the abuser. As poems both versions hold their own. Well done. |
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| Very emotional-i can feel your rage as you wrote this. A great poem, such a shame the scenario wasnt created by your imagination.i think you did well not to 'run away' with this poem. good job. |
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| This really came out with a punch. I felt the rage and the emotion. You wrote it, I felt it. I hate meatloaf, never liked. No one could bribe me to eat it. At any rate, effective poem. Great job. Good message. |
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Comment by: lofty - 2006-04-28 16:36
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| feel it..ouch, great write... |
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Comment by: - 2006-04-28 10:31
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| Meatloaf. Strange world. When I was little i used to hate meatloaf. I could not even take a bite without gagging. Well my mom was an abuser, if I did not eat it at dinner it would be my breakfast. If i did not eat it at breakfast it would be my lunch. The cycle would not end until i ate every bite. I would go days without eating. Meatloaf..a memory lost. |
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