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smalltownpoet
mackenzie schmitt
United States, Oregon, Forest Grove

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instead of tears

you cut instead of crying

you try to fake it

but i can tell you dream of dying

 

it's written on your face

in your words

in your aftertaste

 

your arms show of your brutality

your eyes of the tears that never fall

you long for a feeling of reality

or to just feel nothing at all

 

your language is that of a sorrow

your voice is icey and cold

you've never dreamed passed your tomorrow

for you'll never live to be old

 

yout tongue is twisted with words you've dreamt

your heart is torn into two

you speak the hurtful words you never meant

and hurt the ones who love you

 

your pain is a hidden secret

you act like nothing is wrong

then maybe you will forget

and then life will go on

 

pain to you is a weakness

thats better left unseen

you leave people baffled and speechless

just thinking of what you need

 

people to you are an enemy

because they don't know what you need

they judge on only what they see

you won't ever follow their lead

 

death isn't where you want to end

you want everything to be okay

you need someone that you can depend

and take your cares away

 

 

 


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danieldarwell Comment by: danieldarwell - 2007-03-04 08:57
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Some nice lines in here - I thought "your language is that of a sorrow" was an interesting one because you used "a sorrow" rather than just "sorrow"; it adds an undescribed specificity, of some particular sorrow that the reader (and, it seems, the author) does not entirely understand, rather than just generic sorrow. Well done.
izzye Comment by: izzye - 2007-01-30 01:59
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I like this it reminds me of the angst and rage i have felt before. During some hard lost times. It is very dark and sorrowful, yet a sense of hope runs throughout. I am draw to these lines,
"your pain is a hidden secret

you act like nothing is wrong

then maybe you will forget

and then life will go on"

Good read, thank you
jezreel Comment by: jezreel - 2006-05-01 17:54
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Hmmmm... do I sense a hint of a Saviour in here? I liked this - the feel of it - the darkness pierced with a little light. Interesting.
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