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randyjbc
Rahul D. Gupta
India, New Delhi, New Delhi

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Ode to Excellence

Where art thou, Oh! Greatness that I seek

Where art thou Oh! Elusive magnificence

Can thou ever be found, or will my endeavor

be destined to end in failure

It's a pain, buried deep deep in my soul

A pain that's a constant reminder of my failure

To seek you

Vain I am not, proud I dare not be

For what have I achieved till date

And constantly do I fail to raise the bar

Mediocrity has become my hallmark

Forgive me for asking

Do I actually have it in me?

Because if I don't then why does it hurt so bad

The pain that tortures my soul yet refuses to

Reach the Pad

Why do you OH pen, my weapon of choice

Play truant when I need you the most

To express thoughts that only a heart like mine can

Boast (of)

A poet I am not. An art that I can never master

Yet I write beating my head, juggling words and phrases

Crying out to the muse, to organise my senses

And told me She did

Who the hell do you think you are!!! ( Its my muse after all)

William Shakespeare

Suppress the mind and open up thy soul

Impale thy heart with thy pen

Only then will life come in your dried up glen.

Soak the paper with thy blood

But that sounds so painful Oh muse!

Isn't there an easier way that I can use

Can't understand simple metaphors

Yet calls himself a writer

Will tell this to you only once

Believe me it works

Stuck when ever you are

Open up the treasures of your heart

Believe me Its there

You just need to find the key

And then your creations will be there

FOR ALL TO SEE


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Johndeprey Comment by: Johndeprey - 2008-01-01 03:55
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Yes. I agree with moley - Keats came to my mind too, and his time. I would be very careful in your slipping from one diction to another. I felt "it hurt so bad" so ugly next to the thees and thous. Maybe you intended this as a mockery (as Shakespeare might have done out of the mouths of some of his class-misfit characters). It's an odd piece to read in 2008. I must read more of your work to understand this one I think.
neamae Comment by: neamae - 2006-05-11 17:12
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this is wonderful ... a quite individual style ...
"Yet I write beating my head, juggling words and phrases
Crying out to the muse, to organise my senses" ... great lines

Mandy
timeakinga Comment by: timeakinga - 2006-05-04 04:58
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When I started to read this poem, I didn't know what to expect. I really like this poem, it's so complex! You write about being discouraged, about searching the meaning ,the greatness of your life, about being a poet... Well, I think you are, 'cause you wrote a great poem here! I loved also the end...
Good work!
Timi
Comment by: - 2006-05-03 03:11
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When I first started reading it, i thought it was very Keatsian, but it develops a style of its own towards the end. It's very original, i like it - well done!
Comment by: - 2006-04-30 13:42
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I am no person to critique when I still have so much to learn myself. My key is pain. With my pain comes creativity. It is also scary "for all to see", the thoughts of someone when they are often secretive with their true feelings. The only suggestion I have is this: "or will my endeavor (be not is) destined to end in failure. I look forward to reading more of your work.
Sheri
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