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'The Need For Greed'
We have a pressing need for greed.
We want.
We want to want.
We have to want!
And sure enough, we get ' but,
Enough is not enough.
Sufficient is inadequate.
I want more.
I need more.
Give me more!
We're like spoilt children
in the candy aisle of a supermarket.
We're like starving;
Botox injected Superstars,
adorned with silicon breasts.
Millionaires driving cars and boats,
flying planes worth millions:
more than the average person can afford
in a lifetime.
We're money addicted gamblers.
High rollers.
Roly-poly self-indulgers.
We hunger.
Food obsessive;
excessive, fatsos.
Obese.
Corpulent.
Larger than life.
Unable to move.
Unable to stop!
We're popularity fixated teens,
Striving for acceptance.
Fickle fanatical fashion followers.
We take extreme measures:
absorbed, engrossed,
In the lives of the famous.
We want more.
We need more.
Give me more!
I want.
I want to want.
I have to want!
We have a pressing
need
for greed.
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| Punctuation has major problems, but otherwise only one thing I noticed. You wrote: "spoilt children" and I believe it should be spoiled children. Another good one. Keep going. You're hitting the nail on the head as they say. Janet |
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Comment by: lezah - 2007-01-29 12:24
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Good rhythm running through and an all too realistic topic. I want what I've got and I also demand yours. Ahh, what ever happened to being happy with a cheese sandwich and a glass of lemonade, lol?
'Money-addicted gamblers
roly-poly self-indulgers' - Not personally, of course, but I know of some people to whom this applies! |
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Comment by: - 2006-05-13 22:58
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i want it all and i want it now!! pretty much summs it up.
enough is never enough but is that greed or drive or ambition.
good poem!! |
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| this is a really interesting poem!! the form of it is so great and the intensity builds up. great style, great rhythm. |
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Comment by: mickeyp - 2006-05-03 05:37
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You have a wondeful style and a terrific ear for song. The words merge together in a sort of spinning rhythm that is altogether lyrical. Your bitterness here is warranted. I thought the line "Fickle fanatical fashion followers." was particularly enlightening, as it is becoming more and more a standard for our generation.
I think perhaps the stanza beginning "We want more." was unnecessary since it reiterates the "I want" stanzas and precedes one of them. Maybe placing it somewhere else in the poem would work better?
In any case, you show a firm hold on language that is altogether refreshing. Excellent work. |
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