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colindardis
Colin Dardis
United Kingdom, Country Antrim, Belfast

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The Whiskey Crawl

My throat has that whiskey crawl about it
when the ice is forgotten
and all the oesophagus feels
is the firewater burn
of beakers, containers,
test tube shots,
glass receptacles
pouring flames on a drowning man
until that man is engorged
in his own wanderings
of crazed, empty curiosity
not a lust, but
that can't-help-but-wonder bewilderment
on the stained disco floor,
a sad, desperate volume
that liquid will not fill.

Hearts are not fluid
and into the vacuum of valves and arteries
the whiskey crawl comes
to rebound echoes of previous nights
into the place
where a familiar comfort once rested
on the coals of Sunday mornings
when hangovers did not matter:
they were laughed at even,
the warm, coarse laugh of the whiskey drinker
after feeding off a few.

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wellnessthruplay Comment by: wellnessthruplay Online- 2006-05-06 12:32
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I love that this is split in two. it is a the perfect break to take a breath. It s full and rich with symetry and iamgery. I love the title. It goes perfectly with your work.
Stay away from the whiskey Colin...it is too heart breaking.
dreamer Comment by: dreamer - 2006-05-03 12:24
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Interesting poem. Love the title Whisky crawl. Like the way you get acoss the emptiness.
Joni Ramos Comment by: Joni Ramos Online- 2006-05-02 22:55
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to rebound echoes of previous nights
into the place
where a familiar comfort once rested
on the coals of Sunday mornings
when hangovers did not matter

I could relate to this piece although not a whisky drinker. One too many drinks with Vodka brings drunken memories. Thanks for days like Sundays my recovery day. This was an tribute to Whisky. I felt drunk and woozy after reading this. Quite effective. Thanks for painting a vivid hangover. Well written.
lolly Comment by: lolly - 2006-05-02 10:44
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all this time i've been worrying about lung cancer and it is just the whisky crawl after all?! i'm off to the liquor store to switch to vodka! really loved the flow "Hi My name is Colin D. and I'm a WRITER!"
RoadPoet Comment by: RoadPoet - 2006-05-02 09:40
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Hail to Colin, one preposterously gifted poet of the modern age!

Mate you rock dude, no 2 ways about it! This poem is kickin, flows like a single malt that dangles in the bony palate of the mouth. I also love the fusion of your scientific knowledge, with your obvious gift of expression.

Very, very cool!
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