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taytay06
shaunte pasley
United States, illinois, chicago

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A VISION FROM GOD

As i walked to school oneday, a voice said to me,

"look up to the hills from which your help comes, and i am sure you'll live eternity"

i was suprise because i didn't see anyone but i heard the voice continue to say,

"remember that i made you and without me, there is no other way"

by this time i was scared and didn't know what to do

the voice then said, "fear me not, for iam always with you"

lights begin to shine and i decided to walk

three angels behind each other, started playin beautiful music, but with their harps

"who are you? what do you want from me?" i begin to yell

the voice then said, "Judgement day is almost near and i see your soul in HELL"

i then feel to the ground saying i am sorry that i shouted

the voice then said, "its no need for that"

then i started poutin

"whats happening to me!

I said with shock as i begin to float

the voice then said, "my child you are comming with me,

there is too much sin upon this earth"

So as i walked with my savior even though it was just a dream

i realized my soul wasn't right and i was heading to Hell instead of heaven for eternity!!!


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taylortroutman Comment by: taylortroutman - 2008-05-17 07:49
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I appreciate the use of the psalms to set up the vision with the angels. You have picked up on the Biblical precedent of Word leading to revelation, sound leading to vision.

Here's my question though: is the Biblical solution a sense of being lifted up/taken away or is there a prophetic call to help those around you, to invest in your community to make it better?
Ray07 Comment by: Ray07 - 2006-05-03 13:53
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tay tay you can comment to what i have to say but you can right me back...fuck u...crackhead
taytay06 Comment by: taytay06 - 2006-05-03 10:45
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thank you very much
Ray07 Comment by: Ray07 - 2006-05-02 13:10
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i like that and i wrote one today almost like yours, but i'm still a better writter...yall need to stop reading tay tay poems...groupies!!!!hahahaha
taytay06 Comment by: taytay06 - 2006-05-02 11:18
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thank u very much young lady
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