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Lady Macbeth
The frogspawn hums in a once-puddle,
abandoned by the retreating water.
Compassion drives her hands into the jellied heart
with hopes of rescue.
Each bubble's skin resists her tender clinch.
The viscous ooze slips watery from her scooped palms,
impossible to grasp.
She slides out her defeated hands
and splays her fingers.
Her outstretched palms glisten guilty in the April sunlight.
Though unseen, her fingerprints remain:
evidence of the attempt.
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| I liked this poem very much. I think you have a way with sensory words - I could really feel what you were describing. I could see the viscousness. I could easily imagine the bubbles coming out from between her fingertips as she tried to get them. Nice job. |
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Comment by: - 2006-06-11 17:04
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| You got a way with words. Well done. |
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Comment by: waxseal - 2006-06-06 12:35
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Okay, meekly allowing Teri to beat me with the Frog - but in my defense the first time I read this it didn't have the Lady Macbeth title!!!! (Which I, apparently needed)
But I REALLY like this poem alot:-) |
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Comment by: LadyC - 2006-06-03 01:58
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| I really could see the whole thing. I'm not entirely sure what she was attempting but maybe that was what you intended. |
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Comment by: - 2006-05-04 02:22
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| I think its written beautifully. You really get a feel for the viscous feel and nature of the frogspawn. I love once puddle, there are many great lines eg The viscous ooze slips watery from her scooped palms. I think it reads very well, its simple and concise but sad and fantastically written. I dont particularly like the last line "evidence of the attempt" though - sorry, not sure why, it just seems a bit short and non-poetic |
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