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I find myself wrapped up
in the seperation of you.
Killed by the remnants
of what you have taken away.
Surviving without your breath,
watch as I choke on the ash
of your burning desire.
Forever will I dance
within the closeness
of your negative space.
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"Surviving without your breath,
watch as I choke on the ash
of your burning desire."
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