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A Note On Distraction
There is something in the furnace that spoils the air;
Turns the fruit bowl on its side, its contents;
An offering to the tide has been made; bare feet
And the white horses of the ocean azure roam; wade
In the sands of lost civilizations as if searching for shells;
And here, he hands one to a little boy 'putting it to his ear;
If you listen closely you can hear Atlantis, singing like a choir
Of birds nesting in one's attic. You can hear them, but
Only when the hum of the refrigerator is at it's lowest
And the mechanical parts of the mind; the body machine
Pumping white blood cells and other particles around
In eternal loops; suffers the wheels of life in depths of sleep
As our ears, in which we hear, turning; thoughts like hands
On the crank shaft force them on; churning with forgotten valor
And outdoors a cat stalks a fly. The winged one knows not why
As it will not be used for food nor for clothing or shelter,
It is merely a practice, as old as the hills and the design
Of that wing, on which notions lift to the heavens as Hermes
And his staff; wrapped in hissing scheme it is all just a game;
Between the tumble drier and the washing machine
I cannot see further than my own two feet, hanging here from this chair.
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| I thought it was very good; the imagery about the ocean and hearing Atlantis is very compelling. |
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Comment by: Min - 2006-06-24 13:30
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| Sounds like you had time to contemplate on many things away from mundane chores. |
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| This reminds me of the lyrics of the band the mars volta - lots of unique images combined for a feeling rather than a clear picture. The words "hanging here from this chair" struck me as an amazing way to end a poem - something about the restlessness. |
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| As Manda noted, I loved the gentle flow of images. I became distracted at "pumping white blood cells" and "crank shaft." Crank shaft was a little rough sounding for the other images, but I'm at a loss to figure why "Pumping white blood cells" threw me out. I don't know. It just did. Hows that for a weasel out? All in all a great poem, especially the last stanza. |
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Comment by: Manda - 2006-05-04 18:16
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| this poem certainly feels familiar to me in that at times I get easily distracted. especially when I take the time to just sit and think. the mind can roam at will and sometimes it's just so easy to go with the flow. I quite liked the pace of this poem: slow, ambling, no need to hurry. |
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"We The People"
After dozens of cities are destroyed by nuclear bombs, a group calling itself 'The People' issue demands.
They want the militaries of the world to disband.
The CIA has only the video demands to work with but must find the enemy quickly because governments are starting to comply.
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