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Without Worries

Motionless, like a rock, they think without a clue.

Unaware of the facts that would make you depressed and blue.

And as they sit there, thinking, "What's for lunch?"

There are many people out there ready to recieve a punch.

Murders, suicides, deaths are happening at this time time,

But no, we sit here half asleep to another day.

Depraved of the warm crimson red blood being shed.

Wake up!?

But even if you did, what could you do?

Stop this madness! Please!

Or be like the others who will never realize the truth-

and be without worries.


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redtwinsis Comment by: redtwinsis - 2008-01-15 09:27
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I like this piece I wouldn't change a thing...writting is a form of expression, ones thoughts and feelings...I thought it read just fine :)
alexfielding Comment by: alexfielding - 2006-05-10 11:35
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I like the flow and truth of this. I personally, being a horrible writer, wouldn't change any of it since it's actually a piece of your soul. Let the editors leave you on the floor, keep this the way it is.
Comment by: - 2006-05-05 07:30
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I know. I was afraid of that. At first I was thinking as "they" as people in a classroom. [excluding me] Then I added myself to make it "we"
Min Comment by: Min - 2006-05-04 22:43
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You need to go through this one. Reads O.K. up to 'punch' then it breaks up.
'time, time', 'depraved'?
You've gone from 'they' to 'we'.....has the beginnings of something powerful. Work at it.
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