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flowingink0816
Sean Morrison
United States, Illinois

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Your Eyes (Sparkling Grace)

Your eyes, they smile as I walk on by.
When I see them it seems like I can touch the sky,
but not even the sky on a cloudless day
can match the beauty and perfection which I find within your face.

I love the way you sparkle as you look at me.
Although I want to smile back, for some reason I cannot breathe.
My chance is lost, and you don't know how I feel,
and that just rips me apart, but I'll manage to deal.

Just as long as I...
Just as long as I...

Just as long as I can see you, just as long as you can smile.
Just as long as you can promise me to laugh once in a while.
Just as long as someone knows you, knows you for your smiling face.
Just as long as you can keep yourself that picture of sparkling grace.

So you see me here, afraid to take a step.
This chance may be the best I'll ever have,and yet
as real as this all is, as all my feelings are,
I still feel too damn scared and insecure.

And just as long as I...
Just as long as I...

Jsut as long as I still feel this way, I'm not sure what I'll do.
It is as if my heart and mind are trying to rip my soul in two.
For, this fear, it parlyzes me, but my heart says to go,
so if you haven't noticed just yet, then I just want you to know-

That smile in your eyes as I walk on by.
It makes me feel like I can touch the sky,
and I've fallen for that nearly perfect face.
I have fallen for that picture of sparkling grace.

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marinesdaughter Comment by: marinesdaughter - 2006-07-05 08:43
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I like this poem, I also feel it is very lyrical and want to hum along! Great job!
Vinney2345 Comment by: Vinney2345 - 2006-06-01 16:00
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Very lovely work here, sounds like a song. Very good connection i can make here, This is going on my mental list of favorites. Good work.
Comment by: - 2006-05-17 16:52
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Endearing. This is my type of poetry!
MaryannWebb Comment by: MaryannWebb - 2006-05-17 11:39
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Are you a musician?:) some of the best poems were songs (like the song Vincent by Don McLean) The repetition in this piece fitted well with how the characters state of mind would be given this situation.
I especially loved the line 'It is as if my heart and mind are trying to rip my soul in two.'
The fourth verse almost looks as if it's meant to be read with each line containing approximately 7-9 syllables.. (as the commas show in the verse)
quickrymer Comment by: quickrymer - 2006-05-14 11:48
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very nice lyrics, and as a poem it almost works. Love lorn and tongue tied is a good description by min, and I would add that the insecurity of the narrator shines through
well done
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