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luminesce
there are certain mornings where poetry is unnecessary
the sunlight and a thousand mixed perfumes are enough
stood by the river as swans write their eternal memoirs in repetition
where an early morning ritual forgets itself in novelty
where shadows move beneath the mirror ageless reflections swim in
i run my hand through waist high grass and shrink
back through sensation's template to an earlier place
where i ran blindly through these dreams and knew immortality
i could fly back then and i talked to angels
in nightingale voice, alighintg through each moment's gate
into states my newly awake soul knew as deja vu
samsara turned ox-bow lake not quite reaching round
to swallow it's own tale in me was found
in this ethereal dawn light, winged ephemera alight
and i stare into the sun and am blinded by my own sight
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Comment by: - 2006-05-15 08:41
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| amazing imagery. especially love the first two lines - so true. i totally get where you're coming from on this one. nice write. |
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Comment by: - 2006-05-14 23:36
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mighty fine read paul, powerful, hint of magic and beauty and life worth living, images swimming inside my head drowning me with thought, i dug it much...
tony |
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Comment by: Manda - 2006-05-14 10:39
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I think the only thing that would enhance this poem would be some minor spacing issues. certain images seem too compact, too overwhelming when presented on just one line. otherwise you've got a mighty scene here, all encompassing. nice read :)
one typo: 'alighintg' line10 |
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Comment by: - 2006-05-14 10:01
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| Completely enchanting...the swans, the not quite swallowing of tail, waist high grass, flying, talking to angels, and ethereal dawn. You let us see the magic of this moment. It feels like you have poured warm honey onto my imganation ....heavy, sweet, and natural...love how you have praised nature and hinted to spirituality as well. Great write...it is so soothing...something I would want to read before drifting to sleep. - Leah |
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| amazing visualization. you really bring the reader into it. |
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