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zookeepers wife
christina rothenbeck
United States, NJ, Washington

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My Grandmother's Engagement Photograph

Your hair was darker than in the picture,
styled in careful finger waves framing your face
(your nose not yet showing the Polish bump
I am terrified of developing in my own middle age).
The slim bow of your smile slightly
compressed as if to stifle a laugh.

There's so much I don't know,
not even how you met.
I imagine you, walking past each other
at the Dixie factory where you sorted cups--
he asks a friend your name,
buys you a cup of coffee in the cafeteria.
It is hot and too strong, and you like
his Irish boy's charm.

What I do know:
You married young, nineteen.
Lost your first child, a son,
his name and grave a mystery.
Raised four daughters,
opened a diner together,
vacationed in Florida.

But that day, was it warm?
Did you walk to the studio on your lunch break?
Giggle with your friends and discuss wedding plans,
annoy the photographer,
as your whole life stretched out ahead of you,
clean and unwrinkled as a bridal bed?

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digs Comment by: digs - 2006-02-06 02:56
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A beautiful and moving reflection.
Comment by: - 2005-12-29 23:27
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it is very sensitively written. well done.
Comment by: - 2005-11-15 21:55
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'clean and unwrinkled as a bridal bed' - brilliant! Love your imagery and use of language. This poem reminds me of a couple in the book 'No Holds Barred', edited by the Raving Beauties.
mikerotheatre Comment by: mikerotheatre - 2005-09-06 06:08
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I really like the suppressed imabic pentameters - not all that suppressed, either, since they form the final couplet. You place words with an enticing mixture of the formal and colloquial. As for the content, I want a little more detail somewhere in the middle - perhaps about where the fianc�© was, or the make-up your grandmother wore, or the dress... It's a really good poem, and could, I think, be even better.
Comment by: - 2005-07-29 01:20
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A very touching portrait. Your use of language is clean, refreshing, disarmingly unpretentious and (from reading a few of your poems) you always do great things with the final line...
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