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Hi,
I really like your writing! You seem to be interested in some of the same themes and techniques as me :) I would really like it if you read some of my poetry, check out Drowning and Morning. |
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Comment by: shepard - 2006-06-02 21:50
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I admire this summary of reflection, it reminds me a lot of my own work. A few small suggestions:
"to this dull ache / This suffocation"- I'm prone to say 'ache of suffocation'
"Flooded / with longing"- Perhaps you might say 'flooding' instead, in that the ache is still with you, still coming along, still mounting up. |
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Comment by: Cherley - 2006-05-23 08:33
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| I love nostalgia. You did a nice job. I don't live in the past but I do have flash-backs. LOL The older I get the more, "It was a good year" experiences I have. |
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Comment by: nesca - 2006-05-23 02:14
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beautiful work frances, melancholy and beautiful, lovely...
tony |
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