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Just need some drums to go with this BEAT(nik)- Too Cool for School!!
Love it!!! (snap snap snap) :) |
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Comment by: mitra - 2006-10-18 06:46
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| Your writing seems to be about real issues today and thats really wonderful. Nice rhymes on this one. |
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| Very nice. The use of rhyming poetry is somewhat trite, but it really works nicely here. The theme really grabs my attention. I agree with your reflection on public education. I homeschool my kids because government schooling just sucks all the life out of us and teaches us to not fight our predefined niche in society and to go work for some huge corporation. Bravo! |
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| Great word-usage here and rhyme scheme here Chris, I think it emphasizes your theme very well. |
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ahhhhhhh..I got ya man. Nothing quite the same as the sweet blown blaze. anyway, great rhyme sceme...love---
And force-fed governed education
Coated in septic tank stank from 100 years past-
....lol...love those lines! -Bon |
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