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Elinki
Chris McGuffin
United States, Colorado, Arvada

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Anti-Hack

I've been lost in this maze for days and days
So I graze
For a glass blown blaze
To exert me past this haze
And Cluster-fucked daze
Known as the mundane maze
Constructed of corporate idioms
And force-fed governed education
Coated in septic tank stank from 100 years past-
Out dated and decaying the spirit of today's youth;
Drying out their souls
Leaving an empty chasm
(dark and confused)
To be filled with material slogans
Now Highjacking the being of who ever wishes to listen
Expressing the false need to consume all that is seen.
So I smoke up a glass blown blaze
To regain my spirits rays
And my souls gaze,
Thus escaping this mundane maze.

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maggie m Comment by: maggie m - 2007-01-03 07:06
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Just need some drums to go with this BEAT(nik)- Too Cool for School!!
Love it!!! (snap snap snap) :)
mitra Comment by: mitra - 2006-10-18 06:46
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Your writing seems to be about real issues today and thats really wonderful. Nice rhymes on this one.
fuyukodomo Comment by: fuyukodomo - 2006-06-05 09:49
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Very nice. The use of rhyming poetry is somewhat trite, but it really works nicely here. The theme really grabs my attention. I agree with your reflection on public education. I homeschool my kids because government schooling just sucks all the life out of us and teaches us to not fight our predefined niche in society and to go work for some huge corporation. Bravo!
Fouchega Comment by: Fouchega - 2006-05-24 23:54
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Great word-usage here and rhyme scheme here Chris, I think it emphasizes your theme very well.
bonnieclarke Comment by: bonnieclarke - 2006-05-24 17:29
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ahhhhhhh..I got ya man. Nothing quite the same as the sweet blown blaze. anyway, great rhyme sceme...love---

And force-fed governed education
Coated in septic tank stank from 100 years past-

....lol...love those lines! -Bon
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