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YeOldeFart
Dennis Newman
United States, OR, Springfield

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The 'Hood in The Woods

She concealed herself ten feet above the small patch of bare dirt and settled in to watch and wait. Her sharp eyes were unwavering, her senses focused, waiting for the slightest movement The hot sun beat down upon her back, the air was motionless, she lay in wait as alert as a hunting cat. A stray breeze stirred up a puff of dust. Her eyes shifted, zoomed in, but she didn't move. She knew what she was waiting for.

The day wore on. Wisps of clouds crawled, one at a time, across the sky. The sun inched downward and shadows smudged the landscape. She remained as a sentinel, quiet and unmoving, not the slightest twitch betrayed her presence.

A grain of dirt moved on the slope of a tiny mound. She focused her eyes, her body tensed, sensing the moment was at hand. She crouched, imperceptibly, ready to spring. Another grain of dirt dislodged and moved perhaps a millimeter. A small clod rolled down the mound, then one more, and another. Still she remained as motionless as the tree she hid in. With the patience of a born hunter, she waited, her shiny black body poised and alert.

A cascade of tiny pebbles and grains of dirt rolled down the slope. A fuzzy black and gray creature edged out of the hole. She waited. The spider emerged and stood momentarily as if measuring its surroundings.

She was wise to the ways of the spider and she crouched, waiting for its next move. The spider took several tentative steps, stopped, its legs waving in the air, then broke for the safety of the surrounding brush.

She launched herself into the air and dove straight as an arrow. In the blink of an eye she was upon him. She wrapped her long legs around his body, arched her back and drove her stinger deep. The paralyzing poison took effect immediately. The spider curled into a ball, alive and breathing, but unable to move.

She dragged the spider back to the tunnel and pulled him down into his den. There she positioned herself and laid several eggs on his immobilized body. Later the eggs would hatch and the larvae would feed on the still living spider.
She crawled out of the tunnel. Using her powerful legs, she raked the dirt and clods into place and sealed the hole. The black Spider-Wasp lifted her wings, caught the breeze, and flew away.

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DavidHe Comment by: DavidHe Online- 2007-11-03 05:44
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You wrote a very good story! Few writers can do such a thorough observation. I am not sure about one thing: In the topic "The 'Hood in The Woods", you used only a single quotatin mark, but where is the other one? Or you used one on purpose?
Blackbirdsong Comment by: Blackbirdsong - 2007-07-09 04:25
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You really find beauty in everything don't you, Dennis. Actually I like spiders. I've always thought there were kind of cool and mysterious and there is nothing more beautiful than seeing one of their webs in the winter with tiny droplets of ice and snow on each thread.

So the female spider kills the male? I thought that was only the praying mantis that did that. Now everytime I think of "Charlotte's Web," I'll have a different pov to consider.

Thank you for sharing this. It really is well-written.
Comment by: - 2007-07-03 18:40
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You didn't come right out and say 'tarantula hawk', but I assume that's the beauty you're writing about. Black body, amber under-wings, great manueverability. I admired them in California, at sea-level, and now in New Mexico they are still awesome. Tarantulas beware!
I liked your description of the hunt, and the attack. Maybe a little more about the size of predator and prey. Weightwise the spider is probably at least five times the size of the hawk. But the aggressive and sleek stalker is fast and deadly accurate. I enjoyed the piece.
Anne Comment by: Anne - 2007-07-03 01:37
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Great story. I liked it very much . At first i did not know what the creature was . This adds to the suspense. The spider waiting to be eaten.
wonderful work .

anne x
YeOldeFart Comment by: YeOldeFart - 2007-07-02 22:34
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Good point Parris. You caught me in something I often rail upon. Authenticity. Good on ya and thanks. I'll change antennae to legs.
In answer to Greg's question: Yes, hawks fly exactly as an eagle. They soar and glide and hunt as do eagles, vulture and condors and other scavengers. The only difference is hawks don't scavenge What's the point?
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