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I love the image and the thought. Memories, bitter, sweet, dead but not buried. However, the piece doesn't flow. There's a rock in the river, and I think it's the word "forming" in the 3rd line. IMO it would flow better if you just 86'd the word. 2nd stanza. You should somehow separate "never ends." and "Endless" Slight stumble there too. Perhaps if you exchanged the last lines of the 2nd and 3rd stanzas. Swapped them around.
What do hikers seek on the trail? Why do we like to climb mountains? Follow in the footsteps of Thoreau and thousands of Appalachian Trail thru-hikers in search of the wilderness experience.
