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Chili Dog
Ron Hulshizer II
United States, Nebraska, Lincoln

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Don't Hunt What You Can't Kill

Complicated eyes blood red
Loyal to the end.
Ever the martyr,
You would die for my sins.
You will make me see that.

Obsession?
Perhaps...

The winds of change
How swiftly they come.
Time to purge,
I should die for my sins.
You will make me see that.

Self Preservation?
God yes...

You offered your soul
To the father of lies.
Let me inside,
People should know of my sins.
You will make them see that.

Justification?

No fuckin' way!!!

You can't feel me, kid.
I'm just your rocket man, kid.
A jetpack jaguar in your midnite jungle.
Shouldn't feed the animals
If you don't want to get bit.

Introduction?
Indeed...

I can read you though, baby.
Your just a penis flytrap, baby.
A razor-blade rumba on a full moon timer.
Wouldn't hit the floor
If you don't hear the music.

Self Realization?
God please...

Put down my rabbit, baby.
Take your pills and listen, kid.
Isn't always about charging windmills.
Sometimes... well, a lot of the time...
It is purely about charging asses.

Satisfaction?
Oh hell yeah!!!

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CatmanStu Comment by: CatmanStu - 2006-07-08 23:13
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This is cool like James Dean in an icebox, nailing Jenna Jameson in the ass, in bullet-time.
'A jetpack jaguar in your midnite jungle.' I wish I had come up with this line, awesome.
soloIQ Comment by: soloIQ - 2006-06-30 11:06
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So much attitude comes through this...like that ''rocket man'' punch the best...tho that father of lies line may be better if I got the right jest of what you were saying...you've done this poem thing b4..I can tell.
inviscera Comment by: inviscera - 2006-06-29 06:13
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Interesting and original-sounding. The juxtaposed styles make this a very enjoyable read. Some great word choices.
diyanimal Comment by: diyanimal - 2006-06-26 18:58
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I really like this poem. It says a lot more each time you read it. Good job!
Comment by: - 2006-06-24 08:54
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This is a strong piece of writing. I like how you just put it out there. "Sometimes... well, a lot of the time...
It is purely about charging asses." My sentiments exaclty.
Good to till the last drop.
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