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Vinney2345
Vincent Leidig
United States, IL, Northlake

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Hold me...

Hold me close, hold me tight
Hold me through, the whole night
Tell me now, tell me never,
Make this my only endeavor
Hold me far hold me nigh
Tell me so I can just heave a sigh,

I've loved you for so long,
You're constantly in my mind, my favorite song
Just tell me you feel it too,
My heart is stuck to you, with a smile of glue,

Just one look, was all it took,
All you did was smile
And I ended up a melted pile,

I fell for you so fast
So please just tell me,
So we can make it last.

-Vincent-

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zayra yves Comment by: zayra yves - 2007-09-05 20:53
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This reads like a song and is full of longing....full of desire and emotion. Great love poem.
Susan Comment by: Susan - 2007-07-08 21:48
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I agree with previous comments. It does seem like song lyrics, and the popular line, "You're constantly in my mind, my favorite song," is a good one.
easywriter58 Comment by: easywriter58 - 2007-07-01 14:55
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Reminds me of song lyrics. Ever consider writing for a band?
crackednotbroken Comment by: crackednotbroken - 2007-05-14 19:00
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It seems that it needs work on the rythm. I love that guys think this stuff!!! There's hope yet.
wolfgrl1423 Comment by: wolfgrl1423 - 2007-02-16 11:58
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I really liked this, it showed so much emotion. My favorite line:
"Iâ??ve loved you for so long,
Youâ??re constantly in my mind, my favorite song"
good job!
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