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Kayleigh Stabler
United States, Michigan, Redford

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Go

Out. Far. Go. Leave.
Now. Wait. Go. Stop.
Restriction. Leave.
Love. Restriction.
Restriction. Hate.
Far. Leave. Quickly.
Go. Go. Go. Free.
Far. Stop. Holding.
Turn. Back. Now. Go.
Unknown. No. Stop.
Regret. Lost. Free.
Run. Free. Far. Gone.
Away. Pain. Fear.
Run. Run. Faster.
Hearts. Beat. Quickly.
Pain. Grows. Slowly.
Hesitation. Turn.
Persisting. On.
Lay. Intertwined.
Softly. Breathing.
Two. One. Complete.
Connected. Minds.
Synchronized. Each.
One. Separate.
Together. One.
Hearts. Beat. Breathe.
Inhale. Exhale.
Together. Two.
Forever.

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Comment by: - 2006-06-19 10:53
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I love the flow (or lack there of with the stops & gos) its written really well! Awesome!
PANDORA Comment by: PANDORA - 2006-06-11 17:06
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I like the feel of, go no stay, throughout the whole piece. I have done that once or twice in my life. In the end I decided GO!
RoadPoet Comment by: RoadPoet - 2006-06-10 19:50
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Kayleigh, I love this piece its pithy and realistic with a lot of meanings and emotions. I follow consensus in that the rhythm is awesome in this and draws me in, in rapture! A great piece is all I can say!
inviscera Comment by: inviscera - 2006-06-08 15:22
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Nice work and very different. "Hearts. Beat. Quickly. / Pain. Grows. Slowly" was a really great line. The stop/start rhythm really added to this piece.
barry edwards Comment by: barry edwards - 2006-06-08 15:05
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really stylish..... like the form and content, and the flow is exceptional..really impressed. cool cool
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