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rhythmic twisted manic fuck
rhythmic
twisted
manic fuck
sweeping
seeping through
me
faster
pounding
harder still
keeping
feeling through
me
groping
hoping
harder still
sliding
overwhelming
will
frenzied
grabbing
coming
harder
stunning
still
rhythmic
twisted
manic fuck
and I love you
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| yer, meesa likes the pace and intensity meself |
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| This is twisted and wonderful. I love it! |
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This is awsome. the pacing is spot on, like a countdown to ecstacy. To reiterate to comments made already, the last line is what makes this (it's what gives it the passion), and I would LOVE to see this performed.
Cat. |
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I disagree with Miss Dee; I think this could be read at a really intense manic pace, almost like a choo-choo train running down the tracks to despair. Lana, I think I've found my twin sister of oblivion!
Hannah x |
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this seemed a little less manic, and slow for this piece.
keeping
feeling through
me
overall, great rhythm. would love to see you perform/read it. |
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