P.S did i tell you i loved you
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P.S did i tell you i loved you
Trace the outside of your lips with my finger
Moisture on the tip
Journeys divine
From your lips to mine
Tastes like sugar
Burns like fire
Desire
Tighten your grip
Feel the throb
Rush of blood thickens me
Harder
Ribbed
Clear love dribble
For you to lick
Enjoy
I will
On your knees
I accept your invitation
You lucky
Lucky
Girl
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Comment by: Valerie - 2006-11-21 10:31
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You naughty, naughty boy! A mouthful was said in only 61 words.
Very clever, great writing. I enjoyed it. |
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Comment by: - 2006-09-22 07:29
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This was pretty good.... It would have been better if the whole poem stayed sweet... but the erotica wasnt to strong... but the flow was wonderful! Great job!
~Princess Padge |
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Not to be contrary, but I didn't think it was particularly erotic because he seemed to be taking advantage of the girl (you lucky, lucky girl). Reminds me of some of those guys I didn't go on second dates with . . .
Even so, once again, you really have a talent for telling the story. Even though I wasn't thrilled with the character of the man, you told us how it is |
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Comment by: dreamer - 2006-07-28 07:14
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| I have a feeling that saying I love was forgoten. The last lines made me chuckle "You lucky, Lucky, Girl". I liked the boldness of the poem. |
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Comment by: Khema - 2006-07-27 18:36
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| wowza ... somehow makes me think of nickelback :). great job in expressing something so erotic yet not sounding overly wraunchy. looking forward to reading more. K~ |
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