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jagainst
Jay Halsey
United States, Colorado, Boulder

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room 586, bed 2, take 101 (for Chris)

I've seen this scene before, played out
A hundred and one times
From this fifth floor window

Below me
On asphalt arteries, pot-holed--under construction
Cars like tiny virus
Traveling down Southern Blvd
Today, it's slick with doom
From forecasts of scattered shit
With peeks of hope shining
Through jaded skies
During afternoon rush hour

Across the street
In hills of fresh mowed gold
Rest mansions owned by the very same
White coat legislators and
Medical professionals, who control
Climates of uncontrol in this
Antiseptic atmosphere, asphyxiation
Flows through AC vents and tired hearts

Behind me
Lay yesterday's model man
Pathetic breath travels close
To silence, drowned by the drips
Of various hanging bags and beeps
Of machines with unpronounceable names
Regulating a life with push button power
Screens lit, red digital numbers

I've seen this scene, just like this
Played out in dramatic, big-screen blockbusters
So many goddamned times
From this fifth floor window
Feeling exactly, how I've felt so often, before
Watching Death and Remedy fuck like rabbits
While giving birth to ugly, little 'we don't know's'
Running and screaming down tiled hallways

And, in this chair
I sit, I wait
Patience forever dead
Just waiting
For this panorama
Of repetitious horror
To go dark and blank
Void of this punishment
I'm waiting for stillness or activity
For new life or old'¦
For anything

But
Right now, I'm just waiting, waiting mostly
For the sun to set tonight
On this unchanging view

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willowgroveben Comment by: willowgroveben - 2006-06-14 00:36
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"Watching death and remedy fuck like rabbits" is one hell of a line man. I thought it the heart of the piece. Damn fine.
oddfruit Comment by: oddfruit - 2006-06-13 12:12
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Very eloquent expressions of your feelings at this time Jay. Catharcism is good.
Joni Ramos Comment by: Joni Ramos - 2006-06-12 17:09
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Awwwwwwwwww Jay only you can pull this off. Your narration is brilliant. You have a knack for these kinds of poetries...as usual you have a very keen and amusing way of giving the readers a view of your setting in a very unique, quite often humorous/cynic manner....another one into my bookshelf my man....I don't read much into meter and rhyme just how I feel about the poet's narration...yours just happens to be brilliantly executed as always! Love your romantice ending!
Comment by: - 2006-06-12 13:57
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this is possibly the best thing i have ever read of yours. i absolutely love this. maybe because you have captured a feeling that is so difficult to write or talk about. it's so raw with emotion and lack of emotion, if that makes sense. the imagery is great. the setup is wonderful and makes this piece very relatable. great write, about something very difficult.
Comment by: - 2006-06-12 10:12
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Keep going Jay, better out than in. Wonderful writing, it's very heartbreaking to read. I can think of nothing worse than watching someone you love fade away. Beautiful last stanza. Look after yourself. Bx
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