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window shopping with dorian gray
as if tossing a single glance would break
his emotional bank, he ignored her
like the morning glare on an east facing window
he was arrogant, and she was merely a fleck
on the ass of his self important life
as he gestured for the aid of his partner
who had designed those fancy windows
forever, he was more concerned
with the appearance of lines around his eyes
than the condition of his crumbling stature
that painting in the background, the one
with the frolicking children appeared
in every season, in every theme, it stayed
there, among the trappings and gilded
wrappings of an artist in utter despair
i'm sure I heard him lament the existance
of thinners and towels, the peculiar airs
of those society fraus, with their wealthy
husbands and tacky faux pearls
a fright, yes indeed he explained as he turned
the corner and stepped full stride
into the path of an oncoming train
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| You have a very right brained way of looking at the world. i have read several of your works. I am not usually a fan of free verse but yours projects an interesting perspective. This one seems like one of those co dependent relationships with life. Man, in his arrogance, see's only what he wants to see and misses the details and one day gets hit by the train of reality. Little things are what matter most, and there is a wider perspective than our own. |
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Comment by: - 2007-04-06 08:25
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| Love the ending, smashing his false sense of self-rightous security. I also loved the title, very apt. Great writing, keep sharing your talent. |
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| Oscar Wilde would no doubt be proud. Great ending - a good slap in the face! Reminded me of Kenneth Williams in a funny kind of way (that'll mean nothing to anyone outside of UK, probably). |
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Comment by: Manda - 2006-06-19 16:27
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wink at the german used ;)
this has a complex feel to it, that made me have to read it twice to get the full image of what was going on. however you ended it with my favourite kind of ending: BAM! (no pun intended) I just love stuff that has an unexpected ending. great work. :) |
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| Interesting write, with a great feel to it. Love the Wilde reference (one of my favourite writers anyway, and TPODG in my top 10 novels of all time). Some fab images. "as if tossing a single glance would break / his emotional bank, he ignored her" - v. good lines. Cheers for the read. |
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