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psgri2003
Paul Grimsley
United States, Florida, New Port Richey

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half-hearted requests at god's behest

the drink that fucking ponce stirs
contains diluted gods and monsters
so i snatch it off him and down it
the bastard son of beelzebub? i'll crown it
i'm here to fuck the believers of lies right up
morons searching for a mythical silver cup
that christ might have eaten an ostrich egg out of
and dunked his toast soldiers into
because i doubt this shit you say i doubt god?
don't like the place i've brought original sin to?
i care nothing for your dogma and your bible learning
when all that matters to you is what you're earning
you could twist your soul around any corner in existence
yet you call me evil because i mount some resistance?
go and run away, i promise you're flogging a dead horse
like poirot you say it's hitler's corpse of course
i knew this was a nazi-headfuck of concentration camp proportions
you slick the floor with red as you lie about abortions
and i know that this is all as false as accepted truth ever was
and when i ask you why you just say because
what a let down, what a get out clause, what a cheat
doesn't it give you pause for thought and an urge to retreat?
the putrefaction of the world at your corrupting touch?
to ask you to kill yourself, would that be too much?

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Comment by: - 2006-10-05 08:01
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hey, man. i like this a lot. very powerful. fuck em all!!
stay angry.
simon
momiloco Comment by: momiloco - 2006-08-07 18:50
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powerful, angry and well spoken and written. excellent to me momi
nesca Comment by: nesca - 2006-07-03 04:02
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great stuff paul, grand ideas for one of the grandest farces of all, organized religion...ebautiful, brave and eloquent, good stuff my man, take it easy...

tony
mojoroma24 Comment by: mojoroma24 - 2006-06-20 19:49
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your writing is always so raw and confident. and angry of course. but thats your style, and you hammer it out so viciously and successfully. You have an excellent grasp of language and manage to maintain flow while spilling forth an abundance of words that might trip other people up. Whenever i read your poems i can almost picture you standing there ranting, which is a sign of your success.
Comment by: - 2006-06-16 09:42
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Yep it's angry. Religion is one of those things that always provokes reaction from people. Just a little thought Jesus Christ wouldn't have dipped into a yolk he would probably have belonged to a religious order that were vegan. Ha ...
It's a strong piece, has someone upset you, it's a bit strong to ask someone to kill themselves unless you are talking about Dan Brown. I loved it a lot can't pick a best bit I liked it all.
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