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Dudethissucks
Brandon Bandito
Canada, At school in our nation's capital.

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A Hag's Bucket

Once I walked upon a query,
On a rock path my feet did stray.
Then, clad in black and dirty greys
I came upon two dirty hags.

"No bags are you allowed to carry!"
Cried the hags, two sisters merry.
Bent and kneeled did they, with cackled giggles.
From bushes near they picked ripe cherries.

Their two buckets along the path;
One would pick, the other laugh.
"It is good work we do collecting these,
all these precious ripe cherries."

"Call me Good." "Call me Bad."
"Not one cherry isn't glad,
of what we do for they who mock us;
Seperate them we do, to these two buckets."

Shrieked I did, in what they meant.
No choice these cherries,
of where they went.
Those two hags, kneeled, cackled and bent.
My heart did twitch from the wicked stench.

"My name," spit hag, "is Sherritare.
And this, my sister Tarrishare.
Her bucket sprouts bushes grown by the bay.
Mine I eat with every day."

"These bushes, fellow, yeild our fruit."
She grinned awide and flashed her tooth.
"Tarrishare," cragged Sherritare;
"Your nothing but a stupid twit!
For once I eat those cherries ripe,
I go and roast the pit."

"Shut up old hag!" jested Terri
"Where be us both, without new cherries?
"For the ones in which I plant by the bay,
Shall give us work at tommorow's day."

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Sophia Comment by: Sophia - 2007-01-22 01:16
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This has an old fashioned feel to it, and some nice imagery within the story it tells. I enjoyed reading it.
PANDORA Comment by: PANDORA - 2006-06-22 16:11
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Ok, it is so weird to see my name here. I'll never tell. So you will have to figure it out on your own. The rhyme is well versed and does not feel forced. It sort of reads like a nursery rhyme, and a great tongue twister. Fun to read. **
Azriel Comment by: Azriel - 2006-06-18 18:47
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A real sense of character in this poem, which is good! I can imagine the two hags, and the things they say lay so true. Good use of Rhyme and Rhythm, good read :)
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