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Lydia Tong
United Kingdom, neverland

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Bye bye Love

Your charming face reflects the sun
as I sit by you in the lorry.
Arrive soon, park, be done,
and tell me another story.
Has a thought of me already begun
or lost in summer glory?

You might not entertain a thought
of my identity and presence.
Every pain and longing I fought
taught me a valuable lesson.
Yet if I left me for you to tame,
would everything just be the same?

I clinged to you but walked too slow,
dragged by melancholy sadness.
You promised me to stay and blow
away my silly madness.
I can't keep up your hasty pace,
never complete this race,
With you striking sudden thunders
of your fast mutating wonders.

I turned and tried to search your face
for lines of hesitations,
But what I found within your gaze
aren't signs of reassurance.
Claiming, though distress, you regret.
You rose and ordered me, 'forget'.

The stars will fall and scar my sleep,
Perhaps thats why,
whenever I make a wish I creep.

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AlwaysAshley Comment by: AlwaysAshley - 2007-02-14 21:19
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Very heartwarming piece...

well done

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Poetically Always Ashley
polo Comment by: polo - 2007-02-03 18:59
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love the choice of word .........very powerful and creatures great imagary
jed Comment by: jed - 2006-09-29 17:48
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this was good , never seen "lorry" in a poem before, but seems to fit.
favorite line
Yet if I left me for you to tame,
will everything just be the same?
john ray Comment by: john ray - 2006-09-21 08:33
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its so heartfelt. its so true that im sure people can relate to it. great choice of words!
kidquando Comment by: kidquando - 2006-09-20 09:29
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The narrator cant seem to let go of this love. The desperation is so tragic. We can see an feel the lonliness , the longing this person suffer through, but they see so much potential. Very true to life and somewhat haunting.
Great Job
RJA
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