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sweetalker
Angela Joyce Rose
United States, Tennessee, Eastern

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Bullhorn

He moves slow,
molasses on a hot summer sun:
steady old fire burning within,
rusted train not quite past its prime --

Footsteps clicking
(carefully paced)
often surprising,
for inside this cool-collected machinery
breathes flame

upfront, clear, concise
not lacking for energy
iron.

They don't make 'em like that anymore.

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PANDORA Comment by: PANDORA - 2006-07-03 15:18
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Sleek and sensual. Descriptive vivid imagery. You are right, they just do not make them like they used too.
inviscera Comment by: inviscera - 2006-06-20 20:16
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Gogeous word choices. Wonderful feel and sound to it. Love the dreaminess of those first 2 lines, and the sense of coiled potential you evoke in lines 3 and 4. Cheers.
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