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KevinShinners
KevinShinners
Ireland

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The Money Pit

Endless revolting turmoil,
Churning green clasp,
Knowing only a few brave souls,
Will ever break free its grasp.

Materialistic instinct,
Outweighing spiritual needs,
Slowly, silently, bereft of any warning,
It gorges on its feed.

For only just a moment,
To know the joyous relief,
Of passionate enlightenment,
Unquestioning belief.

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LTAB98 Comment by: LTAB98 - 2007-11-04 07:39
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Like Parthena, I stopped to read because of the picture, but I like it! Very good. Concise, to the point and truthful. Keep it up!
Parthena Comment by: Parthena - 2007-07-01 08:41
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I stopped to read when that profile picture caught my attention ;-)

Profound, and very meaningful to this reader. Being enlightened to the fact that money is just an energy and means of exchange, nothing more, has reduced my stress about it 95%.

The piece is brief, concise and has a strong impact. Very smooth transition and flow from opening to conclusion.
sudipal Comment by: sudipal - 2007-02-23 10:19
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This was good. I especially liked the last stanza.
Boomer McJesus Comment by: Boomer McJesus - 2006-09-16 14:09
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Three stanzas of pure, raw truth. Good work.
Cherley Comment by: Cherley - 2006-06-28 23:20
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This is a nice poem. Money isn't the root of all evil. It's the love of money that's the root of all evil. LOL I guess I'll never find out how a lot of money could corupt a person,
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