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Cursory
Cursory
United Kingdom

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Spring

Woken by the early birds,
singing out their song,
strange to us their language,
to them their mother tounge,

Step outside to the breeze,
so peaceful and so calm,
when like this, so quiet,
Wonder how things come to harm,

Walk in the meadows of fresh flowers,
the pollen slowly drifts,
spring is here now,
No longer winter mists.

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Comment by: - 2006-06-26 10:44
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Was I the only one that really liked this poem? I even prefer winter over spring. This flows well in my mind. I can't see where it is forced, but everyone thinks differently I suppose. O.O
PANDORA Comment by: PANDORA - 2006-06-22 06:02
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The rhyme feels a little pushed, on an otherwise beautiful poem. A serene mood is felt throughout. I look forward to reading more.**
Comment by: - 2006-06-21 19:03
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This has a very musical rhythm. I like it =)
Comment by: - 2006-06-21 12:28
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Woken by early birds- Awoken by the early birds (now you can gain some humour with a picture of old people awaking early birds)
Singing out their song- Singing their song
Strange to us their laungage- Their laungage strange yet of such beauty.

Verse 2:
Steo putside into the breeze- Step outside into the breeze
When like this, so quiet (i would delete this line)
Wonder how things come to harm- How can such things come to harm?
Verse 3:
Strolling through the meadows, vibrant with fresh flowers.
Pollen slowly drifting by
Spring is here
Mists resides no more.
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