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gratitude
thank you for the fever
thank you for when it breaks
thank you for the lightning that
spider-walks in my skull
the muscular fist inside my chest
cage built with feathers
doll made of wet leather
thank you for the fever
thank you for when it breaks.
thank you for the heartache
like a hot pan set in the snow
thanks for the tear in my memory
that makes old things seem like new
thanks for the days like bright gold coins
the stillness, the violence
the fury, the silence
thank you for the heartache
like a hot pan set in the snow.
Thank you for the vibrations
that make me rattle and hum
thank you for the bright white dreams
that blind me like an eclipse
transmissions that pierce my tissue shell
the time that destroys me
the flame that enjoys me
thank you for the vibrations
that make me rattle and hum
thank you for the distance
between here, and a lasting peace
thank you for the nagging need
to define and describe and explain
the lens of memory, the lens of desire
a promise spoken
a charm, a token
thank you for the distance
between here, and a lasting peace.
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Comment by: mitra - 2006-10-27 06:49
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The energy in this is great. Rythm, images and repetition works very well.
"hot pan set in snow""cage built with feathers" and ofcourse the ending sums it all up so well, the ups and downs of this journey called life. |
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My favorite line is: thank you for the heartache
like a hot pan set in the snow.... it inspires alot of consideration about the nature of love and the loss of it... I enjoyed reading it alot. |
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Comment by: Teri - 2006-07-28 05:43
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Wow. To echo Judy, thank you for writing this.
thank you for the distance
between here, and a lasting peace
Great line (although I'd get rid of the comma, but that's JMO)! I want that embroidered on a pillow so I can stare at it. There are only about 3,000 places I can use this in my life right now.
Great poem, Dave. |
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| Thanks, everyone, for your comments - mucho appreciated. |
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Comment by: waxseal - 2006-07-06 12:35
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the stillness, the violence
the fury, the silence - LOVE< LOVE LOVE THESE LINES!!!!! I think you have a ryhme scheme like this in all the stanza's - and those are the stongest lines for me, but I especially liked this set:-) Well done . . . . . again:-) |
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