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YeOldeFart
Dennis Newman
United States, OR, Springfield

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The Ups and Downs of The Common John PART ONE

Cindy Lou thrust her head through the open door. 'Guess what?' She said, 'Ms Douglas hired a newbie to work with us and guess what? '
'About time.' Janette, the tall brunette, said, without looking up from her keyboard.
'Cool! Is she here now?' Nicole said as she slipped a folder into her out-box. 'I mean like, when does she start?'
'I said, guess what?' Cindy Lou repeated with a playful smile.
'What?' Both women said in unison.
'It's a man!' Cindy Lou said, 'Ms Douglas hired a man.'
'A man!' The girls stopped and swung around to face Cindy Lou.
'So?' Janette said, and turned back to her keyboard.
'Wow,' Nicole said fluffing her blonde curls. 'Is he cute?'
'Drop dead gorgeous.' Cindy Lou said. 'Six foot four, dark wavy hair, shoulders out to here, and a tiny little butt.'
'C'mon.' Janette said.
Nicole leaned forward in her chair, 'For real?'
'Naw. I'm kidding, but he's not too bad. Judge for yourself. Ms Douglas should be bringing him in here any minute.'
'A man?' Janette said. 'We've never had a man in this office. What are we going to do with some 'male person' in here?'
Nicole swiveled around to face Janette. 'I think having a guy in here might be kinda cool. You know, like a little different scenery.'
'Yeah,' Janette sniffed. 'Anything would be an improvement.'
'Oh yeah? Speak for yourself' Cindy Lou said.
Janette extended her fingers and examined the nails.
'Lay-dees!' Ms Douglas swept into the office with a big smile. A bespectacled man wearing a vest, a bowtie, and a self-conscious grin followed. 'I want you to meet your new co-worker, Gerard.' Ms Douglas introduced each girl. 'I've just hired him to handle the accounts that Mary had before she left.' She smiled around the room. 'That should come as a relief to some of you. Gerard has over ten years experience in accounts receivable so he'll jump right in and take over where Mary left off. Right now I'm taking him on a tour of our building and when we return I want you ladies to help him get acclimated.'
'Excuse me, Ms Douglas,' Gerard said. 'I've been drinking coffee all morning. I'd like to use the restroom before we go.'
'Another thing about our company,' Ms Douglas said straightening her shoulders , 'We provide a bathroom for each office in each department We found it increases productivity. The door is right over there.'
The girls rolled their eyes and turned to their work.
Gerard entered the bathroom and closed the door. Click! The lock engaged, then the sound of water as Gerard turned a faucet on full force. Cindy Lou stifled a snort, Nicole suppressed a giggle. Ms Douglas cleared her throat and glared at the girls.
Janette pulled her desk drawer out with a bang and rifled through it pulling up one file after another and dropping it back in place. Her lips were a thin, straight line as she tried to hold her laughter.
The peculiar ratcheting of the towel dispenser resounded through the door, and Gerard stepped out.
'OK,' he said, 'I'm ready.' and followed Ms Douglas.
Cindy Lou, obviously straining to restrain herself, made an obnoxious noise through her nose, then let loose. Janette and Nicole started laughing.
'Oh my God,' Janette said gasping for breath. 'Is he going to go through all that every time goes for a whiz?' More laughter.
'Even worse,' Cindy Lou said, 'Are we going to have to do the same thing when we go pee?'
The girls groaned , then more laughter.
'Now I gotta go whiz.' Jeanette laughed, and stepped into the bathroom. 'Oooh nooo,' she wailed, 'He left the seat up!
Cindy Lou and Nicole looked at each other. Neither smiled.
'Oh Cry-Mo-Nelly!' said Cindy Lou

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Comment by: - 2007-02-04 17:06
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Hey, Dennis. Thanks for reading my new upload, Boys without faces, and for your comments. :)

I always like to read your work after I write something brooding, because you always make me laugh. This was a great little story, which I enjoyed a lot. I could know those women personally. Great dialogue.

Only one thing I noticed. A period missing right here:
a bathroom for each office in each department[.] We found it increases productivity.

As always, looking forward too more of your work.

Sincerely,

Lee
YeOldeFart Comment by: YeOldeFart - 2006-07-26 17:43
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I wrote this piece to poke a little satirical fun at some women who complain that men are insensitive when leave the seat up after they've used the toilet. It was meant to be humorous. I'm amazed at some of the remarks. Ladies, where is your sense of humor? Some of you act as if you take this story seriously. So what if women don't normally use "whiz?" So what if they sound retarded? I purposefully made them sound ditzy. You ladies can talk about men as if they're little boys or untrained animals, but when you get a little taste of your own medicine...
tcbswan Comment by: tcbswan Online- 2006-06-25 22:15
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hey dennis,
somehow it seems everyone's focused on the story having to do with the 'new guy' turning on the water to cover the sound of him using the bathroom, rather than the issue of him leaving up the toilet seat--up or down. the toilet seat in an office with all women, one man, and a common bathroom, in my opinion, would be a great source of interest for a story. anywho, a suggestion--change whiz to pee for Jeanette, "Now I gotta go whiz.? I thought it was quite funny! Snappy dialogue and just the kind of thing folk at work spend time talking about rather than actually working. fun stuff!
shaft Comment by: shaft - 2006-06-25 06:18
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I hate to fly in the face of public opinion but I really enjoyed the story. It sounded like he was covering up the fact that he was going for a whizz so the ladies wouldn't hear him, which I thought was funny as hell. Either that or he was whizzing in the sink and only pretending to use the toilet which I also found amusing.

Enjoyable stuff and the laughter at his behaviour is not misplaced.
emmajones Comment by: emmajones - 2006-06-25 05:54
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I'm looking forward to reading the next installment. So far so good. I think considering it has been a female environment the women would find the scenerio of a male entering their environment to be strange. You've set the scene so I'll carry on to the next part.
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