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skettio
Kimberly Rodarte
United States, PA

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Valentine Vilanelle

Three basic colors swirl beneath this brush
and mix. Confusing yellow, blue, and red
the artist paints a heart in Cupid's hand.

The God must shoot and arrow from his bow
and with perfect aim strike a single dead.
Secondary colors swirled beneath a brush

pick up your voice, your laugh, your smile as it glows
and from the music playing inside your head
the artist paints a heart inside your hand.

I want to hold you under a sky of snow,
in spring we'll plant gardens and flowerbeds,
their colors swirling like they're under a brush,

and me, I'm so in love with you that I'll show
how much in Valentines and watch it spead
while an artist paints a heart within my hand.

Can I go whereever you go?
Because it doesn't matter where I'm led
in colors swirled beneath this massive brush
as the artist paints a heart in both our hands.

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PANDORA Comment by: PANDORA - 2006-07-14 17:25
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whereever=wherever (last stanza, 1st line)--

You bring to life emotion through the art of painting and colors to this poem. In fact, the whole poem is very vivid with description. You take the reader on a ride of emotion in a very well formed way. Enojoyed this very much.
suleem Comment by: suleem - 2006-07-14 17:08
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I like the idea of painting a poem in the color of ideas of love. Very inspiring.
nonalienabductee Comment by: nonalienabductee Online- 2006-06-24 06:28
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Love the artist painting a heart inside the hand phrase.
"and me, I'm so in love with you that I'll show
how much in Valentines and watch it spead"
these lines are a little awkward (that's spread, right?) and I think detract from the rest of the poem.
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